MULTI MASTER

TrUbLeMaN · Post by **TrUbLeMaN** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 2:09 am

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/compl ... t5852.html

And With That LINK here Comes

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did ya mama fo da Breast-N-Ass my Quest-Is-Lagged work from my best dudes smoke like test tubes
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you He-Shes-Get-Thrown *LOL* Bust Choppaz n Fuck doctaz ill Keep-Bleed-M.O/ Releasing-These-Chromes
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it Might-Be-Hot i put ''souls in a box'' like a Nike-Shop/ i Fight-He-Watch im Bright-He-Not with A
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who Signed-These-Cops? *Foreal*/ With Chrome And Beams and Only Dreams is to Sight-Me-Popped? SYKE-These-Glocks will leave ya Life-With-DOCS/That Priceless-Jocks my flow worthy itz so dirty wont Collide-With-Mops! im ''Rollin'' like Dice-N-BLOCKS this aint ''street-fighter''But Ive got More Moves Then BISON-GOT!!!

16 Micz · Post by **16 Micz** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:06 am

post a link, and please dont get too ahead of yourself

TrUbLeMaN · Post by **TrUbLeMaN** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:06 am

check da top.........

RH1NO · Post by **RH1NO** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:18 am

way too long ta read it all but i gave it a quick browse

some good shit in there from what i saw some filler

shoullda drop shorter verse if its feed ya lookin for

but overall it was goo just long winded

stay up n keep droppin like ta see more in the future from ya

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 10:58 am

ill read it when you obtain a structured format of writin..

get organized kid

134282 · Post by **134282** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 4:00 pm

I read the whole thing, from start to finish - but I agree with Symbolikull, you need to present your stuff in a cleaner format for easier reading.

Anyway, it was a nice piece - but certainly not worthy of the title "master". You had a few nice lines, but there was a lot of filler in there and some of the lines didn't even make sense. The point of multi-syllabic rhymes isn't to use them so much so that you SOUND like you're good when you're really not. An excellent rapper can bust out a piece like that, with as many multies, and everything would make sense.

For example, what does this mean: Im...Sparking-Heaterz Tall-Llamaz-Reach-Ya Alarmed-With-Da-Reapah...?

Your sparking heaters - I interpret that to mean you're squeezing off bullets from a gun (even though the common, colloquial use for "sparking" usually refers to lighting up a blunt). But you're sparking heaters until llamas reach the person at whom you're firing...? Llamas...? Seriously...? So, when I listen to this, I should fear and respect you because you've got your gun in your hand and you're lettin' off rounds until domesticated, South American ruminant mammals who are related to the camel, walk all the way from where they live to where I am...?

Somehow, they doesn't shine you in a very hardcore light. It just sounds silly.

And you're alarmed with the reaper...? So you have the grim reaper where, in your pocket, or inside your watch or your cell phone, and at some point, the reaper will set off an alarm...? What the fuck does that mean...?

How about this: I Push Fakes-In-Chilled-Streams

You push fake people in streams. Okay, I understand. But they're not just streams into which you're pushing people - they're cold (chilled). Is that really a necessary fact you need to point out...? Of course, not, it's just filler. But there's a lot of it in this piece. Like: Accept-This-Glad. Accept this glad...?

Focus on omitting the filler, making more sense with the things you say and pick a different topic. All these raps about selling drugs, busting gats and "I'm better than you" are getting old. You have a lot of work to do.

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 4:10 pm

jus readin his feed, i would totally have to agree wit him... and well all use filler at some points, but at some point filler is good, but not for content but flow....

jus work on format and structure

TrUbLeMaN · Post by **TrUbLeMaN** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 9:49 pm

IF i put this in a formatted Structure it would make a LONG ASS Post......I Decided it be easier just to read as is instead of formatting it that way all the way threw because i mean come on you gonna see that long ass post and be like "Fuck That"

but Yeah Ima Vet with This battling shit so i know exactly how to format my shit when battling i just felt no need with this piece cuz it was way to long LOL so yep you'll see the Structure whenever i battle but whenever i do drop feeds thats not as long as this then the structure will be there

and Dude who said shit about Llamaz

Its East Coast Slang.............Llamas another term for Gun

MesaR · Post by **MesaR** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 10:05 pm

well just say gun then?.

and lol @ u being a vet.

Bye..

134282 · Post by **134282** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 10:23 pm

TrUbLeMaN wrote:...and Dude who said shit about Llamaz

Its East Coast Slang.............Llamas another term for Gun

Funny, I was born and raised in the Bronx, and now live on Long Island, and I've never heard that term before. And it didn't even rhyme with the other words with which you tried to rhyme it. So stop walking around saying you're a vet when you're not. Judging by substance or multies, there are a lot of people here who would crush you.

And saying you didn't format your post because it's not a battle is like saying you didn't wear a seat belt in a car because you were just going to the store. Format your stuff - stop acting like your shit doesn't stink. I posted a ridiculously long piece not too long ago and plenty of people read it. Take pride in your work or don't post anything at all.

TrUbLeMaN · Post by **TrUbLeMaN** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 10:43 pm

Walking Around Like a Vet When Im Not?
Plenty of People here to Crush Me?

Den Do It

~Symbolikull~ · Post by **~Symbolikull~** » Tue Jul 10, 2007 1:44 am

50 cent uses the term llama

134282 · Post by **134282** » Tue Jul 10, 2007 2:20 am

TrUbLeMaN wrote:Walking Around Like a Vet When Im Not?
Plenty of People here to Crush Me?

Den Do It

Here you go, "MULTI MASTER"...

Kurse · Post by **Kurse** » Tue Jul 10, 2007 4:41 am

I've heard the term Llama before.

Y'all niggaz are supposed to be emcees and textcee's...gotta be educated on todays words kid

Anyways...yea...it's not so much that the stucture of ur verse was hard to read...it's easy to read. It's just the way you have in made it take longer to read and go through.

But quality wise...I thought it was definately a read worth my time. I'd give it a 9/10

Good drop.

Lawgix · Post by **Lawgix** » Tue Jul 10, 2007 4:56 am

dude i really can't even read this shit... ur structure is... well.... u have no structure... ur words are all crammed together and when i saw it i lost interest right there... seriously... work on ur structure... and ur multies seemed forced as hell man... from what i could read it was a whole bunch of forced stuff crammed together and brought to us in a shitty fashion...

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