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Skywalker
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I crush christian hearts like an athiest-priest speaking of the apocalypse and the craziest-beast.Workin dead souls every day of his life still remembers the day he took jesus-christs. Trapped in hell burnin the cross since 3-B.C but in 2006 his soul still fufills-me. i picture this so much diffrently now i pass by a church and imagine it burning down. Why he chose me why am i seeing-this, all i know is im the first satans-witness.
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Post by drunken jesus »

whats the point of the dashes?!? except the first two lines the shit you put dashes in didn't rhyme with anything else
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by complexity »

Satan is here!! This was a little disturbing. I'll give it a 4/10. Keep it up.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

eh... could've been alot better 2/10
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Post by precise »

i wont rate this, but ill give ya some feedback:

diggin the style, pickin entertertaining shit to write about, youre basically lacking in rhymescheme, it started out pretty coo with the "I crush christian hearts like an athiest-priest speaking of the apocalypse and the craziest-beast"

just keep elevatin man
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facin me? its mission impossible, like pickin up lesbian broads
fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage
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Post by Subsist »

Hey it all rhymed with me , was short though.
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