Khan ft. Complex - Less Crime

[complexity]

Khan: Red
Complex;White

I rise above these fakes thugs n gangstas
crimes n drugs equals unsolved murders
the street observers witness the problems
how many times a slug going to solve them
chambers revolving constantly like the earth
this is our life; so honestly whats it worth
when murder reoccurs on the same blocks
so now its ur children dropping like rain drops


Complex I'm Thinking of the Streets I'm contemplating//
Concentrating on how Everyone's Constantly-Debating//
On being Peaceful or Doing Hell-Raising//
With Shells-Blazing livin in this time your life can be Well-Taking//
It Seems That Drugs and Guns Are the Issues//
They'll Miss-you when your leader comes to Present-you//
Cause your Percentage of Rents-Do//
So many white blankets in the streets looks like Tents with red ooz//
you never it thought it Through, on how a simple Crime can come back to Haunt-you//
So you think your powerful with a Gun in yo Hand//
how much power is that when with the same power they took Fam//
that cycle only works one ways//
and that's taking life never bring anyone better-days.




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[MesaR]

alright.

complex yours was alright man abit simple but but it still stuck

when murder reoccurs on the same blocks
so now its ur children dropping like rain drops

Fav Bar By U ^^

Khan Yours was alright too pretty good. flow was good and the multis here and there were decent too.

Complex I'm Thinking of the Streets I'm contemplating//
Concentrating on how Everyone's Constantly-Debating//

Fav Bar ^

Good work You Tooooo

[134282]

Complexity, I don't think you wrote the piece in white. I don't think you wrote it because it's wack. The rhyme scheme is basic and choppy, the whole piece is completely devoid of punctuation (save one semi-colon) and it seems like this is a topic to which you would bring far deeper thoughts. If you wrote this, you rushed it and that's no good. You're too skilled to post rush jobs like this; and you're not skilled enough to rush something without compromising the decent level of skill you've displayed in other pieces.

[complexity]

lol....I have a rebuttal

[KhanVerse903]

look we both write thoes verse in like less than 5 or 10mins. I'm happy with the way it came out and besides i liked the topic, it's Real and that's all that matters to me.

-Khan

[134282]

look we both write thoes verse in like less than 5 or 10mins. I'm happy with the way it came out and besides i liked the topic, it's Real and that's all that matters to me.

-Khan

If you don't want the feedback, then post this kind of stuff on LiveJournal or something. I didn't say anything about your verse - something about which you should be content - just 'Plex's. I'm disappointed that you're happy with the way the piece came out as it reflects poorly on both you and 'Plex. I don't care if it took you three seconds to write the whole thing; if it sucks, it sucks, and the time - or lack thereof - involved becomes a moot point. Only when something is incredible do people start to consider the length of time in which said incredibleness was achieved.

Go right ahead, 'Plex.

[KhanVerse903]

yo i never said i didn't want the Feedback, Bad or good don't matter to me, and I'm glad you state your comments on this piece,but if I'm happy with it...so be it...yeah i know i could have done hella better than that, but still, i wrote it and went to sleep. i didn't mean any disrespect by my other Reply, so don't take it the wrong way.

-Khan

[complexity]

I completely agree. I wanted my verse to be foreshadowed by his verse. Hence Khan ft. Complexity, I'm not saying, I attempted to write horrible. I just made it really short. It's like 30-40 words?

One thing, I do disagree with you about is the ability to always write to your full potential. If people did that they wouldn't get the right amount of practice. IMO, as long as you put effort in it, which I always do, then it should be dropped.

My rebuttal was a better piece just for you.

[134282]

I completely agree. I wanted my verse to be foreshadowed by his verse. Hence Khan ft. Complexity, I'm not saying, I attempted to write horrible. I just made it really short. It's like 30-40 words?

Sixty words, actually... And length is exactly how you convey who's in the forefront as opposed to who's in the background - not skill.

Writing to your full potential may not always yield the best piece of you've ever written. But you need to think that way when you're writing. Some times, a piece just comes together so amazingly. Some times, not so much. But whenever you write something - no matter how short or long - you need to put everything you have into it. If not, then why bother...?

As someone here who has a considerable amount of skill, you need to set an example for the others who look up to you. When they see you putting forth only half the effort you're capable of, then they'll think that's okay. But it's not.

I'm working on a piece right now. I'm, maybe, 12 lines into it, and I've been working on it for two days. It's not even a serious topic; it's a silly little piece that means nothing in the long run. But if it's associated with my name, I want to make sure I've given it my best.