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Dead Silence
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Post by Dead Silence »

that was an ight peice from ya for being ur first horror core peice

Killa Bitch Then Fuck Tha Corpse With Warts 'Til it Feels Tha Force

tha only rel negative thing i had to say is tha wartz part was a lil simple from wat ive seen from you
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Wasnt This Suppose To Be Your " Fuck You Mom " Drop lol?

Then i'd Bring Tha Bitch Back To Do it Again With A Cackle And Grin
it'd Be Worth it End Up Walkin On Death Row 'Til Tha Shackles Are Thin

Fav Bar ^^ Good Use Of Multis At The End Of Bar.


Gonna Leave Bodies And Limbs Hidden in Tha Freezer
Cut Tha Fuckin Head Off And Pluck Tha Eyes Out With Tweezers

^^ I Wasnt Really Felling This Bar, The Rhyme Wasnt Really A Rhyme " Freezer " Tweezers "


Anyway For Ur First Horrocore Style Drop, I Thought It Was Pretty Good All Around.
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Tweezer, And Freezer Yah..

But Not Freezer And Tweezers
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Post by B-Bear »

"Tweezer and freezer" rhymes just as good as "average and damage" that u used in one of your pieces..
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Post by complexity »

I'll leave feedback later, but you get a 10/10 for your sig with Mj.
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