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Small City Town. Ft .. fabolicious

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When The Kids Attack.

.. In A Small City Town Were Pain Runs Deep And You Cant Defeat-The-Anxiety..
.. As People Cry And Scream, And This Lifestyle were Living Runs Deep-In-Society..

.This World Is Precious And The Ink-Im-Touching Might Make You Think-Of-Somethin.
.These Towns Help Run The Earth And There Fighting On The Brink-Of-Destruction...

. . Life Starts For A New Person Everyday, But Soon We Will Be Dwelling-In-Fear....
. . Im Telling-You-Here, To Take Everyday With Caution. Cause The Ending-Is-Near..

... I Try And Neglect The Sorrow And Pain.. Witch I Could Predict-In-My-Life..
.. As These Small City Towns Build Up With Pure Hate, .. Conflict-And-Strife..



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Fab

This small city town is where i fit in and i can walk around//
this is the place i get down.. Hands In The Air Feet On The Ground

like i could roam freely to the comunity hall//
or get my ass down to tha court and play some Ball//

I could do anything in my small city town//
Sitting On The Throne, And Swingin My Crown.//

I Spit Sick Sound Walking Down My Streets..
Off The Mic Ima Demand, If I Get The Right Beats..

Im The Realist Kid Around Know One Can Compare To Me..
People Still Charge To Listen TO Me, When My Cds, Are Free.
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Post by кℓαѕѕιιcк »

yea....

err Rad q:
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Post by RH1NO »

THIS WAS OK

sequence kinda outshined fab

wasnt really feelin it
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was aiight ..
it Wasn`t Decent ..
Tha Second Verse Was Tha Weaker Of Tha Two ..
it Lacked Complex appeal & Creativity ..
Tha Opener Wasn`t Really a Grabber ..
Both Verses Were Dull & Borin` at Times ..
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.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by complexity »

The mood was cool.

Sequence really fell off on his multis. He sorta made up with it on the content.

Fab did alright.

I liked your wordplay in the first bar. Hands in the air, feet on the ground.

Freeflos first bar was nice too.
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Post by MesaR »

Both Verses Were Dull & Borin` at Times ..[/quote]


it wasnt suppose to be a happy written..


thanks for the feedback.
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