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your rewarded for livin right with a key ta the gates
another angels been given flight on ya knees as ya pray
for our fathers and hail mary's
hell is scary we wont be bothered with peace til were in jail or buried
life and death is a metaphor for pleasure and pain
treasure the fame until they pull it out the leather and aim
your mind tries ta hang on like a tethered brain and enters insane
and all you can do is hope that you can weather the rain
they say its the best laid plans of mice and men, an epic story
innocents have fallen and resurrected fury, its expected
that the effects of war n terror has infected glory
who decides whos given wealth at birth or whos dealt the hearse
ask for forgiveness first heaven is universal but theres hell on earth
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Drop Was aiight ..
it Coulda Been Way Better Than Wat U Made it ..
Coulda Used alot Of imagery ..
Open ya Mind Open alot More ..
Look at Things in a Different Light to Make it More Creative ..

Worse Things - .... Lack Of Creativity .. it Didn`t Grab Tha Reader ..
it Was Like 10 inches From Bein` Lame ..

Best Things - Multies & Flow .. They Were Decent ..
Some Multies Were Way More Better Than Others ..
U Stepped Up in This area ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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thanks for feedin it

there will be more ta this

uppin
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