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Quick Freestyle...havent dropped in a while

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I'm hazardous like a bomb threat, ill like a Rakim concept..
like Nas said I only need ONE MIC to make my palms sweat..
Snatch your wallets with a grip thats used to diggin through pockets..
I go back like sportin gold chains and holdin boomboxes..
I'm rhymin to see new profit, with a pair of eyes thats only got 2 sockets..
On my wrist got me rockin new swatches, keep my shoes polished..
I'm like Kanye West, I'm not sure if im up to do College, but i could always use new knowledge..
Hold a stance like im never shooken, I got a east coast flow but wadnt bred in Brooklyn..
keep lookin in my direction and you'll be quick to get ya chedda tooken..
I use hand gestures to get my point across, killin off generations of ancestors..
I cant stand testers that try to hold the same mic that my hand blesses..
My facial expressions cause you to sweat, i can beat any living artist to death..
If you come at the boss, then you'll suffer the cost, I'll punish ya thoughts..
knock out ya teeth and give ya nothin to floss, give ya nothin but knocks..
and bruises, rollin in drops and cruisers, tryin to find a new spot to lose it..
I'm the kid on the block that ya thought was clueless, but im hot and ruthless..
I need to find a new crowd, so i can get down with my self-defined style..
Cool out to the vibe of speakers, Parties packed with tuxedos, i arrive in sneakers..
in a coup that aint got stylish features, I'm the kid tryin ta see doe, style is deeper..
Gutta's like the brotha type, strike like a punch to ya underbite..
fuck what the other's like, one aint enough, i need me 100 MICS
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
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Post by Cee4 »

This was a nice man. Sometimes your flow can be a bit choppy but this flowed well. My favourite bars were the opener and the closer. The multis were decent too. On the downside you were not really saying anything. There wasn`t many quotables but it was still a decent verse.
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Post by Gutta »

thanks for the feed homie...ya im having a lot of trouble with maintaining a concept and im gettin good openers but not good middles...same shit is happenin with me in battles
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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yo it dosent have to be a deep concept. Im kinda fed up with all the drops in the scriptures about how hard life is, how depressed people are..etc. Its hard to get a concept and stick to it. A couple of times ive started writing then after like 10 minutes i just give up cause im too lazy to put the effort in. Thats why i`ve never dropped in the scriptures
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Post by Gutta »

ya..ive not been able to add on to a deep concept so i wind up rambling...but thats what i do in freestyles anyways....
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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Post by complexity »

I loved some lines. Some were pretty dull.

You could easily stick on topics, maybe you're just being to critical of what a concept is.

I've seen you make gangster raps that were on concept and dope all the way through.

When you start using only punchlines through a whole verse, it does get a little pointless.

You're definitely not a rapper who is stuck with the concepts though, or I would attempt to help
you out with the little knowledge I have, but I think you're set. Just rap about what you know.

"I use hand gestures to get my point across, killin off generations of ancestors..
I cant stand testers that try to hold the same mic that my hand blesses"

"I" didn't like the stand testers part, but other than that, one of the multitude of dope lines from the drop.
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