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I can rock a crown loud enough to set off the rictor..
Kill ya brother with a Mic, and get head off ya sister..
Get up in ya skin like the head of a splinter..
If a fool don't pack heat he'll be dead in the winter..


Check it, I let the beat commence me, defeatin MC's that wont cease to tempt me,
Check me, I turn the words that I speak to pennies, till I have enough dollas
To buy each and every bottle of Henny, so I can take it to the streets and drink it steady
When you talk about Remi, dawg I'm sippin plenty, I got a secret envy
For those who throw semi's, towards they enemies like they had beef with Pesci..
Respect me, for I have a lyricist ability that last a whole eternity
I'll burn MC's with the words I speak for a lifetime until its to the dirt with me
So come prepared with wits, or get crushed by narratives
It's imperative or else I'll have ya lookin at defeat like a pair of Kikz
It'll be embarrassing, best be practicing for weeks, or get booed of stage
And thrown back into the streets, where the fiends might jack u for ya sneaks
It'll be sick to see, reminds me of that Lauryn Hill song a Mystery of Iniquity
Kick the beat, so I can show that I'm the hardest with lyrics
Most of the artists u feelin want to tarnish my image
Please pardon my presence, I don't mean to be creative with lyrics
Cut off a faggots feet so he won't be “able to kick itâ€
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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Post by RH1NO »

this was a nice piece multies were on point

kept me readin flow was a little choppy but all together nice drop homie

Check it, I let the beat commence me, defeatin MC's that wont cease to tempt me,
Check me, I turn the words that I speak to pennies, till I have enough dollas
To buy each and every bottle of Henny, so I can take it to the streets and drink it steady
When you talk about Remi, dawg I'm sippin plenty, I got a secret envy
For those who throw semi's, towards they enemies like they had beef with Pesci..

^^liked that whole part

\\w.a.r.//
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

And thrown back into the streets, where the fiends might jack u for ya sneaks
It'll be sick to see, reminds me of that Lauryn Hill song a Mystery of Iniquity

that stood out the most 2 me^ i wuz like damn...good shit,not gonna lie i seen better from u gutta but it was a hot drop tho..liked ur flow it was persistant n didnt really fall off 2 me..we gotta getta crew collab goin on sometime..but keep it up.. rep that W.A.R
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Post by Gutta »

thanks for the feed yall. ya a crew collabo should happen soon mos def
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Post by Prophet »

Good shit, I've seen better from u tho. The multies, were aight, I agree with Rh1no, your flow was a lil choppy. But one thing I've always liked about your drops and battle verses is that whether it be 6 or 10 bars, its always easy to read, and keeps me entertained to. Unlike that Kavorkian dude who dropped 4 bars, and it looked like you were reading chinese, lol.

I look at MC's as nothing more but a get rich quick scheme
Kill em all off, so I'll be the last one standing with six digits of thick c.r.e.a.m.

When you talk about Remi, dawg I'm sippin plenty, I got a secret envy
For those who throw semi's, towards they enemies like they had beef with Pesci..

Kick the beat, so I can show that I'm the hardest with lyrics
Most of the artists u feelin want to tarnish my image

^ Those were my favorite bars

Overall dope piece, keep dropping.
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Post by Gutta »

thanks for the feed fam
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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