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did this up quick
writin through some block....

she used ta be the sweetest girl
sweet sweet like a jolly rancher
now she shake her ass up stage on the pole she a dollar dancer
too much propaganda got ..so many questions but she dont holla answers
used ta treat lil baby in a model manner
but now i mash on the gas n i jus throttle past her
house wife to a ho somebody call the pastor
she a slave ta my flow but she don got a master
never used ta drink now she a bottle master
still got love fa shawty you know ill pop a bastard
she still rules my dream the reason i blew the steam
is not even the fact that she blew the cream
the fact that my mood is mean might be rude it seems
but she screwed the team now i gotta do it
rearend douche these fiends
a foot in a few asses = some shoes ta clean
ta prove my juice is clean
i got a lock on material you cant knock the imperial
im rippin lil mama's shirt off like a box top of cereal
only took a beer or two for her ta feel the mood
got a look on her face like she fear the wood
silence is golden but id rather hear her dude
she on her knees watchin tryna copy what the mirror do
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uppin a little feed
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i got a lock on material you cant knock the imperial
im rippin lil mama's shirt off like a box top of cereal

but now i mash on the gas n i jus throttle past her
house wife to a ho somebody call the pastor

strongest bars^^

anyway, it's alright... considering it's a freestyle i'll bump that into good.. if u can get a decent structure u'll prolly improve greatly..

got taht feelin of u talkin from your gut on this one.. like that.. weird rhyme scheme at the beginning tho.. didn't catch that one.. i think the end stood out as the best piece of the verse, execpt for the two bars i mentioned before.. keep it up.. a rare topic when u drop.. lol.. but anyway, keep it up! i wanna see more bitch!
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word i appreciate the feed i was tryin somethin different

i tried ta switch how it flowed wit the multi change

idk i was blocked a little so i was jus gettin somethin out n it worked

thanx homie

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Post by Kurse »

Ha Ha...now this shit was sick!
This is my kinda shit...definately a 10/10 imo
I dunno...I just like shit like this.
Especially the rippin of her shirt off like a box top of cereal....slick line.
Anyways...this is th best drop I've seen from anyone in weeks.
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appreciate the feed big kurse glad you enjoyed it

this piece was in fact meant for an audio verse

thanks for takin the time your feed is always appreciated
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

she still rules my dream the reason i blew the steam
is not even the fact that she blew the cream
the fact that my mood is mean might be rude it seems
but she screwed the team now i gotta do it
rearend douche these fiends
a foot in a few asses = some shoes ta clean
ta prove my juice is clean

my fav bars^...cool shit,diff kinda drop from u,or anyone as of late..nice shit,feelin the topic and enjoyed the flow,good multis,u shud do a part 2 or sumthin
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word i might jus do that appreciate the feed homie good ta see everyone enjoyin this

you know ill return the favor
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