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Ever Since i Started......

Post by кℓαѕѕιιcк »

Ever Since i started hip-hop//
ive been posting whack-drops//
now its time to turn around//
u know change of wind//
if imma make it to tha top imma have to sin//

Upgrade with tha metaphores//
and stop dreaming of the filthy whores//
and..
sacrifice a couple of lunches//
and work on tha flow and punches//...


gtg i'll complete it later.....


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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

Ever Since i started hip-hop//
ive been posting whack-drops//
now its time to turn around//
u know change of wind//
if imma make it to tha top imma have to sin//

Upgrade with tha metaphores//
and stop dreaming of the filthy whores//
and..
sacrifice a couple of lunches//
and work on tha flow and punches//...

lines are way 2 fuckin short for one..and dont ever say 'im postin whack drops' or anything implying ur wack..{for future reference}

ur structure iz very off 2 me and why do u have that 'and' after the flithy whores line?it isnt needed..well u said ur finishing this later..took what i said into consideration tho...wanna see the final product..PeaCe
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Post by Cee4 »

nah man. honestly your the only person ive ever seen on here who hasn`t improved at all
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lmfao^harsh..but eh...Walks Away in Agreement
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