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Brah-Vo
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somethin simple

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somethin simple... not really all that good. Was tryna work on my storytelling. Tell me what ya think. feed4feed.

Forced into sex slavery
mama commended her on her bravery
mama forced her to do ugly things
just so they could survive, eat and drink.
started when she was ten, back then
still didnt understand what she was doin
by the age of 11 her innocence was ruined
mama felt guilty wat was she to do
baby girl getting pounded by guys from a crew
yehhhhh gangbang they cried
as tears ran down baby girls blue eyes
next day dirty trucker drivin his truck drives by
asks for mamas young girl, to have a good time.
only 11 loose as if she were thirty seven
her arm grasped tight by the grown mans hand
taken back to an apartment a barren, no mans land
threw her on a bed that smelled like wasteland
goosbumps poppin on her skin, she was so scared
the man, about to commit a terrible sin, only stared
how could a pretty little thing be tainted in such a harsh way
on the dirty matress she lay
waiting her fate
mama followed the man, saw what she was doing to her daughter
what she saw made her stomach run
she clasped her mouth and said "What have i done?
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

topic is str8.. the flow could be better.. kinda hard for me to find a steady flow in this.. bit choppy at most.. keep droppin
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