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Something i Wrote a Little While Back Just After The Punchline Tourney, Pretty Rushed But Came Out Ok.

i Dont Hype Myself Often, i Let My Fans Take-The-Role ..||
They Ride So They Can 'Dodge a Schoolin' Like They Faked-The-Cold ..||
i Test-The-Haters, We're in The Same Game But im a Better-Player ..||
i'll Pierce ur Armour in a Battle So Bad u Call ur 'Pen-a-Traitor' ..|| (Penetrator)
Some Fakers Try To Turn On Me, Soon Forget About The Mess-For-Later ..||
i'll Put The 'Chop' in ur Vendettas Like i Was To 'invest-a-Gator' ..|| (investigator)
Leavin Scars On ur Arm And Face, Wrists Like They Took-The-Razor ..||
Battlin Me's Worse Than Old Men Molesting The 'Youth-in-Asia' ..|| (Euthanasia)
ur Punches Get Brushed Like if Tyson Was To Spar-With-Featherweights ..||
Liftin Handles On a Bike Frame is The Only Way ur Bars-Will-Elevate ..||
i'm Not a Pimp im Just Suave, i'll Fuck a Bitch And Tell-Em-Later ..||
More Women 'Go Down On Me' Than Abercrombie Elevators!! ..||
My 'Pen' Holds More Sickness Than Jails-in-South-America ..||
To Stab a Fag With, Like Aids, Now The Gays-About-To-Let-it-Run ..||
i'll Stack-My-Fame And Wrap-The-Game Like Monopoly in The Packaging ..||
Cuz Domino's The Hottest Flow To Hit The Street Since Acid Rain ..||


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this part was def hot..

Some Fakers Try To Turn On Me, Soon Forget About The Mess-For-Later ..||
i'll Put The 'Chop' in ur Vendettas Like i Was To 'invest-a-Gator' ..|| (investigator)
Leavin Scars On ur Arm And Face, Wrists Like They Took-The-Razor ..||
Battlin Me's Worse Than Old Men Molesting The 'Youth-in-Asia' ..|| (Euthanasia)
ur Punches Get Brushed Like if Tyson Was To Spar-With-Featherweights ..||
Liftin Handles On a Bike Frame is The Only Way ur Bars-Will-Elevate ..||
i'm Not a Pimp im Just Suave, i'll Fuck a Bitch And Tell-Em-Later ..||
More Women 'Go Down On Me' Than Abercrombie Elevators!! ..||
My 'Pen' Holds More Sickness Than Jails-in-South-America ..||


structure could have been more consistent, but flow was still straight.. actually i loved that part qouted..lol.. the first two bars was a bit basic, almost made me stop, but u stepped up, even though the last bar wasn't the same quality.. multies are good, as always.. keep it up man!
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ironically he quoted everything i liked about it^^ buttttttt the closing bar was nice 2...i didnt really think the structure was bad tho..kool shit Tre...PeaCe
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Thanks For The Feed And Uppin.
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Post by precise »

this is siiiiiick man, i enjoyed readin it, love the wordplays, no point in quotin anything cause its dope all the way through lmao, a couple of the punches i think i heard you use before but you put em in a better context in this so i guess its all good
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fuck all these thespian frauds, they "bug me" like espionage
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it was fuckin dope dude... the one line that stood out for me was...

i'm Not a Pimp im Just Suave, i'll Fuck a Bitch And Tell-Em-Later ..||
More Women 'Go Down On Me' Than Abercrombie Elevators!! ..||

haha keep it up!
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Bump For Old Time's Sake.
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lol Never Fail To Impress Me..

Liftin Handles On a Bike Frame is The Only Way ur Bars-Will-Elevate ..||
i'm Not a Pimp im Just Suave, i'll Fuck a Bitch And Tell-Em-Later ..||
More Women 'Go Down On Me' Than Abercrombie Elevators!! ..||
My 'Pen' Holds More Sickness Than Jails-in-South-America ..||
To Stab a Fag With, Like Aids, Now The Gays-About-To-Let-it-Run ..||
i'll Stack-My-Fame And Wrap-The-Game Like Monopoly in The Packaging ..||
Cuz Domino's The Hottest Flow To Hit The Street Since Acid Rain ..||


I Liked Dat Schoolin Punch 2... LoL U Rip'd Dis Shit..
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Why wasn't this piece up for written of the month?
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Wow Domino. For real you're really skilled. I liked this very much. nice work bruz.
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