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Post by Brah-Vo »

i was bored and decided to write another piece. This time about swords not guns. lol.
Be nice :(
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its raiza sharpe with fifty-`five blades-`out
slice ya cranium up lift-`ya brains-`out.//.
my blades go shing-`shing, crack ya skull open make ya sing-`sing
when im done my blood stained hands i be rin-`sing, on the streets they call me the asian king-`pin.//.
i aint part of the yakuza or the muthefuckin tri-`ads
i shoot my own bazooka call me a homicidal fire-`man.//.
they call me a killin machine heart-`less and relent-`less society's pest the city i infest
just imagine this sharp-`blade-`pressed against you,don't need a second-`guess to find out what happens-`next.//.
they say jack the ripper was evil but im twice-`as-`bad
call me a butcher your a piece of meat i'll slice-`ya in-`half.//.
i don't take-`no-`shit like a land-`mine ill explode if you step-`on-`me
i'll break-`you into-`bits, funnel u out like sands-`of-`time and slice ya neck-`like a-`tree B!.//.
i'll clasically perform surgery on thee hold up the mirror to ya face, what youve become u can see
you'll be drastically changed you practically dont need to wear a mask when your performing a burg-`lary..//.

hmm... you're probably as ugly as that retard working at burger-`king
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^ Man illest is DEAD
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dude if ur ever gonna leave some feed at least make it helpful dickhead. Get the fuck out of my thread.
I already shut my mouth and left you alone but ur still picking shit up again.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

i aint part of the yakuza or the muthefuckin tri-`ads
i shoot my own bazooka call me a homicidal fire-`man.//.

probably had the best flow in my opinion, overall it was alright i guess nothing special.. just needs some work here n there with the rhyme scheme.. other than that it wasn't too bad, keep droppin
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

thought your opener was tight and the bar that ekoms mentions was tight, you fell off a lot wit your flow, i think your tryin to use to many multies when you really dont know the whole concept of them.. other than that it had its up and downs jus as every other verse does. keep droppin
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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you're putting in too much of these signs " ' > , - ' " , if a multie or punch is not visible enough alone without any signals then it just doesnt count. plus it twinks my eyes.
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thanks for the feed sym and ekoms. lol subsist :P
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Post by Momeijah »

Raiza_shaRpe` wrote:Get the fuck out of my thread.
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am i Such a Role Model For These Kids?
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AKA SCOTCH HALL, MOE MEIJER & MOMEIJAH.
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