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Politically Incorrect #3

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let's put this in context, you're saying God specifically cares about your conscience, of the billions of people who have lived, that's egotistical nonsense, God exists that's a metaphysical concept, it has nothing to do with you, or your religious alignments, we don't need to finish the science, it's common sense, that we having giving to divine prints, the finger tips of god, imprinted on us since the different species evolved, I'd be dumb to say a higher being wasn't involved, still the earth doesn't revolve around us, we are narcissistic to believe God started with us then built from the ground up, I'm not trying to be profound or sophisticated, but isn't God what life created, and we just desecrated it, made it a part of death n related it, how do we have the guts to say this shit, and call it faith it makes me sick, if we could wrap our heads around our own existence, you think we would still live? that's being religious, I'm not intelligent enough to say I know the truth, I'm not an atheist, I just flow the truth
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good verse. the vocab was awesome (shit i sound like Ol Boy Slim). flow was good. when i seen the structure i thought it would be hard to follow but it worked pretty well. the topic was alright. the only criticism is its startin to get a bit repetitive but still a dope verse

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Post by complexity »

Thanks for the feedback.

That's why #3 is a wrap up to the religious stuff. #4 is a special one.
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i liked this, but i think politically incorrect #2 was my fav. the way you did them all was well done though, and i enjoyed reading them and looked forward to seeing the next ones, which ive never done so be proud! haha. good job plex.
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Repetetive as it is, i love what your doing with with subject.
IMO #2 was better then this, couldn't really follow this very well.

the vocab was awesome (lol)
the flow could've been better. Same with the structure.
As always, interesting ideas. I like what you've done with it.
Nice work.
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