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MesaR
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Hiphop's Youth

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Real quick drop was writting this about for 30 minutes on and off. just thought i should drop something.



kids-and-groups, listen to music and now think beef-is-nothing-but-great..
riding around in whips-and-coupes, now the street-is-buzzing-with-hate .. .
this dream~is~real, so i gotta interveine with kids, and stop~the~youth..
scream~the~real, goverment's dont do anything besides block~the~truth..
resign to tha pad~and~pens, thinking hard day and night, and write~whats~dope
be glad~it~ends coz what happend to the emcee were rap was his life~and~hopes
gun-a-fool, when you see an emcee spitting it fake about to start killing-rap..
people obssed with rapper's who spit one-syllable now were's the skill-in-that?
i never chose-for-glory, but people grabbing my tee's when a trends-in-pace..
and you know-the-story better yet, people still try and defend-your-case !!
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by Brah-Vo »

iight since u broke down mine im gonna break down urs mah nigg, LOL.



kids-and-groups, listen to music and now think beef-is-nothing-but-great..
riding around in whips-and-coupes, now the street-is-buzzing-with-hate .. .

^^^was pretty dope but wasnt really feelin it. Seemed abit forced.

this dream~is~real, so i gotta interveine with kids, and stop~the~youth..
scream~the~real, goverment's dont do anything besides block~the~truth..

^^ liked this bar alot. Spoke a good message and nice flow

resign to tha pad~and~pens, thinking hard day and night, and write~whats~dope
be glad~it~ends coz what happend to the emcee were rap was his life~and~hopes

^^^ favourite bar. probably the best bar in the piece.

gun-a-fool, when you see an emcee spitting it fake about to start killing-rap..
people obssed with rapper's who spit one-syllable now were's the skill-in-that?

again a good bar. Solid, flow was nice. Got the message across.

i never chose-for-glory, but people grabbing my tee's when a trends-in-pace..
and you know-the-story better yet, people still try and defend-your-case !!

^^ another favourite bar of mine.



All in all this was a dope piece for a quickie. you really got your message across, structure and flow was good and everything else was good as well. Nice work Scotty.
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Post by LadySam »

this was good for something quick

this was my fav bar

this dream~is~real, so i gotta interveine with kids, and stop~the~youth..
scream~the~real, goverment's dont do anything besides block~the~truth

your getting better buddy good lad haha.
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