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RH1NO
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Lost Cause..

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lesson known when
the nest was flown you
spread your wings out just ta know
chest out testin the dexterity
but perishing your flesh and bone
where she goin where will the path unfold
will it take her away from the methodone
guess her will power will never know
high as fuck but sittin on a lesser throne
somewhere along the line she lost guidance
confided in liars and found the cost of violence
after the loss subsided now i find my thoughts divided
somewhere along shits creek and the waterfall defiance
try ta get her on track n back to the master plan
when i try ta help her she just attacks me fam
ima battered man, got her lighter to the crack glass
like she tryna melt it back ta sand
cant stand seein her hair in tattered strands
prayer seekin through scattered hands
80 lbs soakin wet weak shes shattered man
turned my back couldnt stand ta see her bleed son
did all i could now i realize that shes done
im not a quitter by no means..just know a lost cause when i see one..damn
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

didnt think this was gonna flow that good but it turned out decent..liked these bars right here

somewhere along the line she lost guidance
confided in liars and found the cost of violence
after the loss subsided now i find my thoughts divided
somewhere along shits creek and the waterfall defiance

good shit^..nice lil piece tho man u shud do more..and if u get time leave feed on a few of my drops..good shit tho peace
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Post by Cee4 »

overall this was pretty decent. nothin exceptional but it did the job.
flow was straight the whole way through.


fav bars

like she tryna melt it back ta sand
cant stand seein her hair in tattered strands
prayer seekin through scattered hands
80 lbs soakin wet weak shes shattered man
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Piece was straight. Overall it was good but you've done way better.
Agree with cee4 on the face bars. Mad shit.
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