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Raiza Sharpe's Declassified Survival Guide: Vol. II

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In The Last Episode:

We Find Our hero wandering through the wilderness of the rap world as he ponders on his thoughts.

Just then, Hater Ninja Jumps towards him!

"Hater Ninja!" He Exclaimed, as he readied him self for battle.




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Fuck Ya'll Haters ...

Chicketycheckcheck

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Dont hold ya breath why you bustin-`a-`sweat
this things fuckin suicide like you cussin-`at-`plex .//.
Call me General Sharpe, i command this rap-`shit
spit bullets, when the gat-`spits the impact splats-`body-`bits .//.
you just sunk down to a whole-`new-`low
yeen't big pimpin, you stole-`your-`hoes .//.
watch it, ill stomp on ya head with mah timbaland-`boots
the trannys in the stands-`hoot-`at you like you givin handjobs-`and-`roots .//.
Yeh Bob has a cooch haha! you love penetrating inverted-`dicks
rejecting chicks, hatin on tits call me a soccer player your head-`ill-`kick .//.
bitch you dont know me i shoot heavy like i just had-`beans
faggot ill splice ya genes put you inbetween your 2 dad's-`spleens .//.
Whatever i say ya'll better-`do
im el capitan, a trend setter-`too .//.
lemme send a letter-`to your dead rap-`career
you never spat courages all u spat-`was-`fear .//.
i'll tap-`ya-`ear mic check is this shit-`on?
your a weak muthafucka one hit-`ya-`gone .//.
like chicken tonight i got you dancin-`round like a-`bitch
you talk too much sooner or later i be blastin-`a-`snitch .//.
intensified hallucinations and vivid-`visions
brought to you by you and your stupid-`decisions .//.
you decided to mess with the wrong guy
so the same wrong guy decided to give you nintey nine nines .//.
ill send you to the tunnel make you see-`bright-`lights
ill fuckin kick your ass just like when bruce lee-`fights .//.
when bruce lee fights? fuck yeh ill burn u quicka then fried-`rice
you stinky as fuck like dead-`mice i'll bust ya dome just like head-lice .//.
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Raiza Give Up.. My Lil Bruva Can Spit Betta Den LOL
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Lmfao instead of postin a verse for b-bear or droppin a diss to kurse you come here tryna act like you know shit.
Like i said before if u gonna leave some feed leave some proper feed too. And at least finish your sentences. PLEASE FINISH YOUR SENTENCES. You seem more of a retard the way your typing.
Oh and by the way, The only thing you and your little brother are spitting is curry.
Now stfu and get outta my thread.

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im a bit tipsy right now but to me that dosent make any sense lol.
i would highlight certain parts but im i dont get pretty much the whole thing.
i dont get the title and whats the script with the shit at the start.
i think your trying too hard to be creative and it just ends up looking ridiculous cause it dosent make any sense
ive seen you do better than this

ehh honestly i hated this
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lol word. I've been tryna make a series pretty much based on life. This was just a diss verse pretty much. You'll see the next installments become more meaningful. Thanks for the feed though c4.
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Raiza_shaRpe` wrote:lol word. I've been tryna make a series pretty much based on life. This was just a diss verse pretty much. You'll see the next installments become more meaningful. Thanks for the feed though c4.

it dosent need to be meaningful just make sure it makes sense.
eg. "i`ll bust your dome like head lice". i cant see what your tryin to say but head lice dont bust your head.
there were several other moments like this in your verse.


oh and get rid of the gay intros. they make me not want to like your verses
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