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Haz · Post by **Haz** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 10:59 am

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Yeah.. Listen.. This is on Some Different Shit...

Single Mother Proud To Make it, So Many Angry But She Aint Allow The Hatrid
Raizin a Child in The Projects, it Was a Project To Teach Here Child To Avoida Rockit/
Day Job Night Job, Her Crib in The Hood Every Day Robbed Every Night Robbed
She One Night Sobbed on her Knees Asking Herself is This Really Life God?/
Her Man Bounced,Walkin alone every Man Pounced Plus Ha Baby Shit a Damn Ounce
So She Wrapd Towels on his Ass, Borrowd cash ( I-O-U) Like Pernouncin Vowels in a Class/
Her mans Back , Giving her a Jaw a Damn crack big Enough to fit a box of Tam- Paxs..
her Son tried To protect Her so hes Beatin a Kid,Hate Tattd in His heart Like it Got Received ina Bid/
So The kids face Was Always Black And Green ( Celtic Colors Like The NBA Lacked-a-Team )
He Grew up Selling Crack Ta Fiends,Wishing To See His Father So he Can Go Clit Clack n Steam/
Moms Still a Striver God must Of Revived Her, 5 Different Kinds of Cancers ( Shes a Surviver)...

Glamtrash · Post by **Glamtrash** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 11:15 am

All in all it's a good piece. A lil sloppy in parts but not horrible.

Day Job Night Job, Her Crib in The Hood Every Day Robbed Every Night Robbed
She One Night Sobbed on her Knees Asking Herself is This Really Life God?/
^^ I like that...It happens enough..

So She Wrapd Towels on his Ass, Borrowd cash ( I-O-U) Like Pernouncin Vowels in a Class/
Her mans Back , Giving her a Jaw a Damn crack
^^ This is my favourite part. Partially because it's written well, and partially because i can relate.

Moms Still a Striver God must Of Revived Her, 5 Different Kinds of Cancers ( Shes a Surviver)...
^^ Good closing line. takes it home.

All in all good drop, keep doin ya thing...And thanks for the feedback on the poetry.

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 11:20 am

Thanks For the Feed.. and No Problem..

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 2:04 pm

Her mans Back , Giving her a Jaw a Damn crack big Enough to fit a box of Tam- Paxs..
her Son tried To protect Her so hes Beatin a Kid,Hate Tattd in His heart Like it Got Received ina Bid/

liked that bar above those most 4 some reason it juz hit me..keep workin on it tho

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 2:14 pm

Thanks Fa Tha Feed

Brah-Vo · Post by **Brah-Vo** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 3:11 pm

Yo haz i like how your taking a much softer persona now ..
It was good fir a first time. in fact very good.
Abit sloppy but yeh it was good.
Keep it up bro.

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 3:16 pm

Yeah.. i Took a Different Approach to Shit..

Thanks for Tha Feed..

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Mon Dec 03, 2007 10:58 pm

Thanks Fa Tha Feed

Momeijah · Post by **Momeijah** » Tue Dec 04, 2007 7:21 am

Yeah This Was Dope, The Rhymescheme And Similies Stood Out The Most For Me in This, Could Work On The Flow a Little Though, it Was a Tad Choppy at Parts Or Maybe it Was Just The Way i Read it.

Good To See u Dropping a Lot Of Shit, On Different Topics And in Different Styles, Diversity is Always a Good Thing To Have.

So The kids face Was Always Black And Green ( Celtic Colors Like The NBA Lacked-a-Team )

^Favourite Line, Dope Ass Similie.

Keep Droppin.

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Tue Dec 04, 2007 8:13 am

Ty i'll Drop Feed On Ur New Drop

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