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Gutta & Rhino Diss

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rest-in-peace-vt7212.html


Put Um ina Box Like Dominos For Fuckin Witha Flow Thats Raiza Sharp
These Niggahz Styles To Commin-Yo..We Shock Um Like The Crew Taized Dey Heartz/

Like a Goalie Play Ya Part, Cus im Ready To Score a Numba Like a Playas Start
To Lay-a-Mark..U Murdaed FIN-S But Role Playin in Jaws Three The Way u Could Slaya Shark/

Battling Us is Like Tryna Inslave Niggahz While u Steam Ports Taken Shit To Supreme Court
You Niggahz Waitin To Step Up Like im Ona Fiend Porch,U Dont Got Enough Like Ya Green Short/


Nuff-Heart To Grab The Gun "Clutch-Spark" .. Unwrap Niggahz Layers Just Like a Dutch Part..
Ya Heart is Where ya Asshole is.. I Aint Worried Where He Bitin From Why i Wan Part in This Asshole Bizz/

You Probalay Gettin Angry From-This-Rhyme Cause im Proven You Dun Fell Off Like Talkin COLUMBIS TIME
Ayoo DOM! We Dominatin Like a Strong Gene,Niggahz Made Out To be Bitches Like On Um a Thong Seen/

Ur Betta Off Fuckin WIt Tha SONG SCENE..Ima Nightmare ( No Happiness) Dawg u Picked Tha WRONG DREAM
i'll Go Off On U Like The Dad U Aint-Had ( U Coulda Been Raized in The Worse Situation) U Still Aint BAD/

Ur Soft-Son Rockin Lip Gloss-Dun.. Ayo U Rap ABout Clipz And Shit So Much Then Fuckin TOSS SOME
Like Multiple Assholez, Yall Multiple Assholez For Forcin Every Single One Of ya MULTIPLES ASSHOLEZ/

Eight Bars is Eazii Like Fuckin a Skeet, Whos Stuck in The Streets Every Thing i Bustt She Will Eat..
Eaziia Den a Eazii Pass in N.Y.z Pay Tollz, Dese Niggahz Like Individuals Pizza Slices Dey Cant Stay WHOLE/
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Re: Gutta & Rhino Diss

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-.HaZarD.- wrote:rest-in-peace-vt7212.html


Put Um ina Box Like Dominos For Fuckin Witha Flow Thats Raiza Sharp
These Niggahz Styles To Commin-Yo..We Shock Um Like The Crew Taized Dey Heartz/

Good Opener, Nice Nameplays And a Nice Little Punch Although it Was Basic.

Like a Goalie Play Ya Part, Cus im Ready To Score a Numba Like a Playas Start
To Lay-a-Mark..U Murdaed FIN-S But Role Playin in Jaws Three The Way u Could Slaya Shark/

That Wordplay is Dope, The Rhymescheme Was Nice Resulting in a Good Flow.

Battling Us is Like Tryna Inslave Niggahz While u Steam Ports Taken Shit To Supreme Court
You Niggahz Waitin To Step Up Like im Ona Fiend Porch,U Dont Got Enough Like Ya Green Short/

Wasn't Really Feeling This Bar, The Punch Never Really Hit as Well as it Could've. if u Re-worded it it Could've Been Dope. Seems Like a Filler Though, Still The Flow Was There.

Nuff-Heart To Grab The Gun "Clutch-Spark" .. Unwrap Niggahz Layers Just Like a Dutch Part..
Ya Heart is Where ya Asshole is.. I Aint Worried Where He Bitin From Why i Wan Part in This Asshole Bizz/

This One Seemed Like a Filler Aswell, And The 2nd Line Kinda Threw The Flow Off, Probably The Worst Line in The Drop.

You Probalay Gettin Angry From-This-Rhyme Cause im Proven You Dun Fell Off Like Talkin COLUMBIS TIME
Ayoo DOM! We Dominatin Like a Strong Gene,Niggahz Made Out To be Bitches Like On Um a Thong Seen/

The Punch On The 1st Line Was Creative, But The One On The 2nd Line Was Pretty Basic, Face-it u Racist i Hate-Kids And Slay-Shit. (Lmao Well Creative Rhymes With Basic, i Had To Continue).

Ur Betta Off Fuckin WIt Tha SONG SCENE..Ima Nightmare ( No Happiness) Dawg u Picked Tha WRONG DREAM
i'll Go Off On U Like The Dad U Aint-Had ( U Coulda Been Raized in The Worse Situation) U Still Aint BAD/

These Are The Kinda Punches i Like (1st Line), Simple Yet Clever. i Wnna See u Write More Punches Like That Aright Lol. The Wordplay On The Second Line Was Aright But Passable, Still a Solid Bar Though.

Ur Soft-Son Rockin Lip Gloss-Dun.. Ayo U Rap ABout Clipz And Shit So Much Then Fuckin TOSS SOME
Like Multiple Assholez, Yall Multiple Assholez For Forcin Every Single One Of ya MULTIPLES ASSHOLEZ/

Lmao, Decent Setup But The 2nd Line Was Pretty ill. i Love That Kinda Wordplay Especially if u Can Pull it Off So it Makes Sense Without Reading it More Than Once.

Eight Bars is Eazii Like Fuckin a Skeet, Whos Stuck in The Streets Every Thing i Bustt She Will Eat..
Eaziia Den a Eazii Pass in N.Y.z Pay Tollz, Dese Niggahz Like Individuals Pizza Slices Dey Cant Stay WHOLE/

Decent Bar, Good Choice For The Finisher But Not The Best Bar in The Drop.
Overall it Was Dope, But Had a Couple Of Fillers, And To Me That Means a Couple Of Fillers Too Many. imo, Definitely an Average Work-as-Usual Hazard Drop, Nothing Spectacular But u Delivered. Rhymescheme Was Nice, Flow Was Fine, Multis Were Dope, And u Had Some Snappy Simple Punches (The Best Kind imo). i Like ur Style Of Wordplay Aswell, u Should Have a Lot More Of Them But Don't Overdo it Haha. u Should Also Work On Cleaning Up ur Lines a Bit, as in Not Using Many Filler Words Like 'Yo, Son, Fuckin' And General Words That Are Only There To Benefit The Flow, But Other Than That it Was Dope. Keep Droppin.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this was nice i think dom broke it down perfectly though, so i wont go into too much detail wit it but it tended to fall off in parts, and i personally dont like how you flip the rhyme scheme all around in the middle of completin a bar, jus my opinion though. nice shit
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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