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Complexity ft. Double FL - Washed Away Emotions

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Double Fl - Violet
Complexity - Red ( first 4 lines a play off a nas song, dont' quote them)

How can i show devotion with no emotions
take these pills, down this bottle and keep on coastin
Y'all make my life out to look so easy
But it's what goes on behind doors that you can't see
that's essential to who I am: this is me,
The girl with the tats, the piercings, and her bottle of JD.
The one whos crazy, whos got no mind
Fucked royally, but she stays on the grind
Livin it up, fourteen bottles a week
Till she can't stand, talk, move, think or speak.
Stuck in a warped out dillusion of reality
But I'll scrap any bitch that wants to challenge me
Charges for B&E. assault, and possession
have fucked my resumé and left me stressin.
But I know the cause of all this friction
is my love affair with Mr. Gibson.


Sherri died at age 33, there's thirty three shots
from twin bottles, theres sixteen apiece, that's thirty-two
Which means, one of the bottles was holdin 17
twenty seven hit her, and six went into me
Everybodies gotta die sometime; heaven seems so far away
that's when the stars replace the sunshine
terrible crimes are committed, the nights born
the same bottle she drank out of takes life form
the only thing, gone is time, and even that's forever
the hole is gone, and my heart is back together
complete like a master piece, I hold her strong
as we meet, harmony; in peace, our souls beyond
I keep holding on; my love is deep as this bottle is
her essence is sweet, good intentions drowned in hollowness
how can she compete, or I, she'll go back to her sleep
for now good bye, and I'll go to back to the beat
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Alright Concept And Idea's . Think both of you have a simaliar style coming to these sort of drops pretty nice overall some bars were not executed that well, but you spoke with ' emotion ' witch both of you do very well



How can i show devotion with no emotions
take these pills, down this bottle and keep on coastin

ehh a pretty basic opener here, you getting a msg across straight away though.

Y'all make my life out to look so easy
But it's what goes on behind doors that you can't see

toke me 3 times to understand what this meant lol,
that's essential to who I am: this is me,
The girl with the tats, the piercings, and her bottle of JD.

Nothing Special, Expressing YOURSELF witch is good

The one whos crazy, whos got no mind
Fucked royally, but she stays on the grind

Ehhhhh .. Did not like this bar really

Livin it up, fourteen bottles a week
Till she can't stand, talk, move, think or speak.

dope bar, probley ya best..

Stuck in a warped out dillusion of reality
But I'll scrap any bitch that wants to challenge me

lol, i hope that is not true.. a pretty nice bar here too

Charges for B&E. assault, and possession
have fucked my resumé and left me stressin.

^ nice
But I know the cause of all this friction
is my love affair with Mr. Gibson.

weak ending probley beacause i dont get it





terrible crimes are committed, the nights born
the same bottle she drank out of takes life form

dope opener man, i think there could be many ways of understanding this bar from each diffrent reader.. my first instinct was that she drank to much, and became pregnet if not tell me .

the only thing, gone is time, and even that's forever
the hole is gone, and my heart is back together

pretty nice here complexity, i wish you wouldnt of went to the softer side of this drop just yet

complete like a master piece, I hold her strong
as we meet, harmony; in peace, our souls beyond

Really felling this bar two man .. this is being fire so far
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keep holding on; my love is deep as this bottle is
her essence is sweet, good intentions vs awfullness

nice concept Sketchy rhymes though..

how can she compete, or I, she'll go back to her sleep
for now good bye, and I'll go to back to the beat

& a decent closer, wish this was a abit longer ..

anyways i thought complexity out shined you here double FL. not a bad verse from you, but with these drops its really hard for anyone to do it as good as complexity.. i thought you stuck on topic better then him so thats good.. enjoy the feed.

highlights of this collab was


Livin it up, fourteen bottles a week
Till she can't stand, talk, move, think or speak.
terrible crimes are committed, the nights born
the same bottle she drank out of takes life form
the only thing, gone is time, and even that's forever
the hole is gone, and my heart is back together
complete like a master piece, I hold her strong
as we meet, harmony; in peace, our souls beyond

Dope Shit Both Of YOU ! worth the read

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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this shit was pretty dope you guys, dbl fl i aint seen shit from you, i wasnt aware of ur gender, you show some sick skill, and plex you played off her verse very nicely, concept was nice.

good job ppls
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Post by Glamtrash »

Thanks guys.

Sequence...Mr Gibson = Gibsons Finest Whiskey (12 years old with the gold wrapper, to be exact).
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Post by complexity »

"I keep holding on; my love is deep as this bottle is
her essence is sweet, good intentions drowned in hollowness "

Changed this.

By the way. Sherri died at 33 of alcoholism and was a friend of mine, who I drank with. That's where
the whole story comes from. The middle part was me being drunk. The ending bars wrap it all up.

Big ups on your verse Double Fl like I already told you.

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Post by precise »

good call proppin gibsons finest lol, thats what the champs drink

this wasnt bad, to me it seemed like shandas tryna switch to rap n plex is tryna do a poetry style
but it worked out, was an entertainin read
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Post by LadySam »

i liked this. i think dfl should write more, she always shows heaps of emotion, and i almost always like what plex writes. i think you two did well together, she started it off solidly and plex finished it off well.
good job guys.
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

cool collab u 2..kinda like ours that we did Double and it only got like one response LOL..newayz plex im sorry 4 the loss of ur friend,u came with some raw shit with this,good depth and emotion..props..Double u seem'ta be steppin up each time i see u drop weather rappin or poetry,keep doin ur thing tho..but 2 the both of u the flow was decent,pretty good grasp of the concept,keep droppin,good shit
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Post by complexity »

It's not for any particular reason. I've seen drops of yours get 12
bits of feedback while mine get zero.

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terrible crimes are committed, the nights born
the same bottle she drank out of takes life form
the only thing, gone is time, and even that's forever
the hole is gone, and my heart is back together
complete like a master piece, I hold her strong
as we meet, harmony; in peace, our souls beyond
I keep holding on; my love is deep as this bottle is
her essence is sweet, good intentions drowned in hollowness

^ Emotion Was brought good...

Double F Brought Alotta Emotion 2..
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Post by B-Bear »

This is something i imagine coulda been on a track.. but anyway, FL, it's the first piece i've ever read from u and gotta say it's alright.. couple of good lines, flow was straight, lackin vocab - woulda loved to see a more descriptive type of writin to such a theme..

plex, kinda what i expected, nice vocab.. creatin a good picture, flow was good.. inspired by nas one this one? (except for the 4 bars) similar to his flow.. anyway, collab was straight - good topic.. bit short perhaps.. but anyway, keep it up.. both of u!
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It's not really inspired from it.
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