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RH1NO ft. ~Symbolikull~ : Vice Versa pt. 2

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RH1NO ft. ~Symbolikull~ : Vice Versa pt. 2

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RH1NO
~Symbolikull~


life is will, in death will you choose a knife or pills
strife n thrills, gift n curse time gives life n kills
writin wills before ya times up so another lifes fulfilled
oldy but goody or a new classic, step on the brakes as you blew past it
old body in a new casket, measures are safe n sound but too drastic
so what are you askin, the meaning of lifes been worn out like new fashions
an algabraic twist, dont count on doin the math its just a calculated risk
how do sounds relate ta this, slow the beat down while the albums playin quick
so define stress, the definition is me wearin my vest wit the nine pressed
findin myself in a fine mess, for feedin you a truth that you couldnt digest
i diss you and you diss me, cuz were different g so we should all agree
just to disagree, simple see, so were all in accordance like a prison tee


Times at a stand still, lyrics wrote, beat drops to show the heat of our hand skills,
I was born dead so my blood cant spill, I get up then fall down like anvils,
Pause then spit it, ecliptic writtens spittin you missed it then in minutes its witnessed,
Listen Prisms are splittin, wrists left wit stitches, then ya Eyes in visioned the incisions,
You failed then made the decision, celebrated the victory now ur back in the past,
Fires blazin, now its smoking like inscents spark the lighter like a match to the gas,
Its like rewindin a tape, reminissin the times that are great but were takin away,
Bodies achin from pain, bruises appear thru trials were kept gainin a day,
So im blowin out smoke, the joint regains composer suddenly im rollin the dope,
Like its me holdin my hopes, dreams, seeds n stems are controlling my copes,
So I proceed to be finished, heavens miles away but hell can be seen in the distant,
Its heats my enrichments, in this vicious cycle So whats the sense of bein consistant,
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

ill give some feed on rh1nos verse...

i thought this was ur strongest set in the verse

oldy but goody or a new classic, step on the brakes as you blew past it
old body in a new casket, measures are safe n sound but too drastic
so what are you askin, the meaning of lifes been worn out like new fashions
an algabraic twist, dont count on doin the math its just a calculated risk

though you brought out the topin nicely here, the resr was tight too flow stayed consistant wit inner-outer multies, nice job homie...!
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by complexity »

"so what are you askin, the meaning of lifes been worn out like new fashions
an algabraic twist, dont count on doin the math its just a calculated risk"

Dope line, that's all I really cared for. The rest was alright.

"Times at a stand still, lyrics wrote, beat drops to show the heat of our hand skills,
I was born dead so my blood cant spill, I get up then fall down like anvils,

Not feeling it, a bit to simple. The first line was alright. But was used more as a stilt
for the second line.

Pause then spit it, ecliptic writtens spittin you missed it then in minutes its witnessed,
Listen Prisms are splittin, wrists left wit stitches, then ya Eyes in visioned the incisions,

To much bones and not enough meat.

You failed then made the decision, celebrated the victory now ur back in the past,
Fires blazin, now its smoking like inscents spark the lighter like a match to the gas,

Another simple simile.

Its like rewindin a tape, reminissin the times that are great but were takin away,
Bodies achin from pain, bruises appear thru trials were kept gainin a day,

I didn't like the ending at all.

So im blowin out smoke, the joint regains composer suddenly im rollin the dope,
Like its me holdin my hopes, dreams, seeds n stems are controlling my copes,

I didn't like the end again. The lead up was nice though.

So I proceed to be finished, heavens miles away but hell can be seen in the distant,
Its heats my enrichments, in this vicious cycle So whats the sense of bein consistant,"

Good ending. I guess.

Overall, I thought the verses went together nicely and it was interesting. A lot of metaphors by Ghost and Rhino that I didn't point out that show creative writing.

Ghost was a bit heavy on the rhymes though and it ruined a few bars, if I'm being picky.

Rhino was a bit to simple in a couple bars.

I liked it though. I think, this was one of the better collabs in a bit. Keep it up.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

thanx for the feed homie
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Shit was a dope collab.
But in my opinion, Rh1no kinda outshined ghost.
Only by a little bit. His verse flowed excellently with great multies.

Fave rh1no bars:

life is will, in death will you choose a knife or pills
strife n thrills, gift n curse time gives life n kills

so define stress, the definition is me wearin my vest wit the nine pressed
findin myself in a fine mess, for feedin you a truth that you couldnt digest

@Ghost: This was a great verse rh1no's was just abit better. You had great great sims and multies but could've been so much better.


Fave Symbolikull Bars:

Pause then spit it, ecliptic writtens spittin you missed it then in minutes its witnessed,
Listen Prisms are splittin, wrists left wit stitches, then ya Eyes in visioned the incisions,
You failed then made the decision, celebrated the victory now ur back in the past,
Fires blazin, now its smoking like inscents spark the lighter like a match to the gas,


Great collab dudes.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

thanx for the feed man

uppin
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Post by Haz »

Rhinos Corny..

Its like rewindin a tape, reminissin the times that are great but were takin away,
Bodies achin from pain, bruises appear thru trials were kept gainin a day,
So im blowin out smoke, the joint regains composer suddenly im rollin the dope,
Like its me holdin my hopes, dreams, seeds n stems are controlling my copes,
So I proceed to be finished, heavens miles away but hell can be seen in the distant,
Its heats my enrichments, in this vicious cycle So whats the sense of bein consistant, < Wud i Liked From you
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