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Politically Incorrect #6 - One Up

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My adrenaline has increased again - the capsule from my pen leaks a blue
stream of ink through the tube, then it truely speaks to you
like these political candidates won't do, I'm sick of the liberal shit
just because I hold some of their views, they put me in the middle of it
fuck you, live a little bit, become an independent mind
if I have to spend the time to defend a line one more time
I'm going to extend a nine, fuck your views, your offending mine
everytime these emcees pretend to rhyme, following a trend
how about I lend a spine, to these faggots, you aint no friend of mine
your the type to get your opinions straight from 'Russel Simmons'
what the fuck is that, plex was born with nothing but 'hussel in him'
like a young Jay Z, which means, born alone; die alone, on my own
I could make both the olson twins healthy with all the fiber in my bones
I don't even have the respect for you assholes to 'answer the rumors'
that's why I will die-ill like I got communicable 'cancerous tumors'
my fans can assume this, if you can't understand the music
don't follow the movement you look stupid trying to dance with the cool kids
I hit like the cronic, fit to do non-sense, cuz i spit with a conscience
true to myself; i don't fill up my shit with ebonics
I'm not a product of my enviroment, I'm the devilish intelligence
wired with an elegance that's admired by these irrelevant
emcees who sell-dumb music, and seldom use it, I'm selfish
I wouldn't sell my soul, all the shit I've dealt with these kids seldom know
I'm like elvis, that zealous, and all of you are jealous
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

flowed ridiculously plex, mad shit here...

like these political candidates won't do, I'm sick of the liberal shit
just because I hold some of their views, they put me in the middle of it
fuck you, live a little bit, become an independent mind
if I have to spend the time to defend a line one more time
I'm going to extend a nine, fuck your views, your offending mine
everytime these emcees pretend to rhyme, following a trend
how about I lend a spine, to these faggots, you aint no friend of mine
your the type to get your opinions straight from 'Russel Simmons'
what the fuck is that, plex was born with nothing but 'hussel in him'
like a young Jay Z, which means, born alone; die alone, on my own
I could make both the olson twins healthy with all the fiber in my bones

this was the strongest part of it, but this

I don't even have the respect for you assholes to 'answer the rumors'
that's why I will die-ill like I got communicable 'cancerous tumors'
my fans can assume this, if you can't understand the music
don't follow the movement you look stupid trying to dance with the cool kids
I hit like the cronic, fit to do non-sense, cuz i spit with a conscience
true to myself; i don't fill up my shit with ebonics
I'm not a product of my enviroment, I'm the devilish intelligence
wired with an elegance that's admired by these irrelevant
emcees who sell-dumb music, and seldom use it, I'm selfish
I wouldn't sell my soul, all the shit I've dealt with these kids seldom know
I'm like elvis, that zealous, and all of you are jealous ( i put hoes here..lol)

shit was mad real dude...

9/10 and i dont rate most verses, but this deserves it, nice job man
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Brah-Vo »

The structure was simple and enjoyable.
It flowed remarkably, great multies,
great metas and just an awesome piece.
You really got your msg across.
I think this was better then the rest of your PI series.
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Post by Cee4 »

*EDITED TO MAKE SOME SENSE

this was pretty dope. vocab, flow were straight as usual

My adrenaline has increased again - the capsule from my pen leaks a blue
stream of ink through the tube, then it truely speaks to you
like these political candidates won't do, I'm sick of the liberal shit
just because I hold some of their views, they put me in the middle of it
fuck you, live a little bit, become an independent mind
if I have to spend the time to defend a line one more time

good vocab and flow but nothin that really intrests me. i thought it was a kinda slow start.

how about I lend a spine, to these faggots, you aint no friend of mine
your the type to get your opinions straight from 'Russel Simmons'
what the fuck is that, plex was born with nothing but 'hussel in him'
like a young Jay Z, which means, born alone; die alone, on my own
I could make both the olson twins healthy with all the fiber in my bones
I don't even have the respect for you assholes to 'answer the rumors'

this was much better. i like it when u write more aggressive like this. the olson twins shit was funny

that's why I will die-ill like I got communicable 'cancerous tumors'
my fans can assume this, if you can't understand the music
don't follow the movement you look stupid trying to dance with the cool kids
I hit like the cronic, fit to do non-sense, cuz i spit with a conscience
true to myself; i don't fill up my shit with ebonics

this was good. i feel what your sayin about the ebonics. people that use them all the time annoy me


I'm not a product of my enviroment, I'm the devilish intelligence

this is my favourite part of the verse. im the devilish intelligence- i like that shit


emcees who sell-dumb music, and seldom use it, I'm selfish
I wouldn't sell my soul, all the shit I've dealt with these kids seldom know
I'm like elvis, that zealous, and all of you are jealous

nice closer to good piece.
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Post by Haz »

if I have to spend the time to defend a line one more time
I'm going to extend a nine, fuck your views, your offending mine <--Reminded Me of Some "The way i Am" Type Shit


I don't even have the respect for you assholes to 'answer the rumors'
that's why I will die-ill like I got communicable 'cancerous tumors'
^^ lol Dat Shit Wuz Funny


I'm not a product of my enviroment, I'm the devilish intelligence
wired with an elegance that's admired by these irrelevant
emcees who sell-dumb music, and seldom use it, < ill Word play lol



Those Were the Parts of the verse Dat Stuck out Most To Me...

it Wus a Solid verse u Came Across With Alot Multies.. the Flow wus Good..
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