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I'd call me poetic but my minds all fucked up, Nothins left every time i try i have no luck. Stuck on the colder side of the stone, I'd rather commit suicide then be alone.



My mind feels posessed by demons, In time the rest will see them. My hearts slowly bleeding every pump i'm slowly dieing, There ain't shit to beleive in No reason for trying. No reason for lying the darker side of the rock has my life, It's hard to find that scott has his mind right. I never do cause my mind states always suicidal, But honestly i just wish that i would die soon.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

nothin spectacular, way too short, no structure, no really one to like the feel pitty for me i wanna die shit, so i would like to see some more shit from you, you may have some potential
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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ur back?....er wat?..i dunno...but this isnt ne better than ne thing i have seen from u in past years...lol....the topic was alright..the way u went about it...ehhhhh not very well....structure was messier than wen i drop writtens....and the rhymes were quite basic i must add.....but...keep workin on ur shit...as ive seen u doing for a loooong time now...
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Never really said it was anything spectacular..it was some simple random shit... some 15 secs typed out shit... i know i've did better...and i know i could do better...
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thaphantom wrote:Never really said it was anything spectacular..it was some simple random shit... some 15 secs typed out shit... i know i've did better...and i know i could do better...

anytime u have dropped...n someone has said somethin like wat was said above...uve said it was typed in 15 seconds...or like 30 or 45.....wtf u gonna randomly write some wack shit for n then post it?....dats kinda dumb...i think u took ur time...lol
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Post by Glamtrash »

Seems emo.....and even for being written in fifteen seconds, it's nothing all that great. Not horrible though. Tell you what, sit down, think shit out, take your time and you might be able to come up with some decent shit.
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Well i'm not here to entertain you guys to be honest. I jus put it up to put it up....why u think i haven't posted in awhile....you guys try to criticize too much and half of you guys can even really write or rap..So before u hate..think...you feel me...And i have never shown any of you guys anything i took my time on...lol anyways...stop bein dick riders
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thaphantom wrote:Well i'm not here to entertain you guys to be honest. I jus put it up to put it up....why u think i haven't posted in awhile....you guys try to criticize too much and half of you guys can even really write or rap..So before u hate..think...you feel me...And i have never shown any of you guys anything i took my time on...lol anyways...stop bein dick riders

lol dick riders?....good one!...listen to double...shes got a great point
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