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Trip Thru Hell Pt 1

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ThaOneYouHate -

Never Go Ta Rehab But i'll Confess i'ma Fiend
i Can See Reality And Still Confess That i Dream
When My Face Hits Tha Mirror i invision Heaven
Blow Another Line.. i Lost Count Was it Six Or Seven?
No One Knows About Tha Block i'm From
You See Tha Triggas With Tha Cock On Son
Hammers Alwayz Pull Befo Ya Squeeze
With Life An Death Ya Always On Ya Knees
it's Sick But i Focus On Tha Green
All My Hope is On Tha Fiends
i'm Always in Tha Kitchen Bakin
Fiends Out Knowin They Kids is Wakin
Jamaicans Always Throwin Hatians
So i Open Up Tha Oven Always Throwin Cake in
Tha Fiends is Scrapin While Tha Rock is Tastin Funny
i'm On Tha Grind Always Chasin Hunniez
Not A Thug i'm Just Out Ta Make Tha Money
i'll Raise Tha Fith And Let Tha Llama Rape A Monkey


Hazard:

Aint Nothin Gittin Well im Constantly Flippin Cellz Tryin To Connect Wit God Cause i " Sit in Hell"
Love Ones Diein I Pretend To Pray Cause God has No Ears He Cant Hear Me Any Ways..

Through Tha Atmosphere as Multiple Semis Spray (people pack Invisible Luggage) not Many Stay
Twistin Blunts Thinkin Bout Twisted Thoughts ..No Helping Hands only Tha " Wristliss Walk"

Gotta Move ya head Back & Forth Wen u Pickin Up Niggahz iz Good Flyer Boys Known Fa "Stickin Up"
I Haddah Chance To Strta Movement in da Kitchen But,I Took Value in Wud i Wus Spittin Up..

NOW LISTEN UP..

Blades On Me Like ima Vampire. Incase these Money Hungry Vultures Strt Slipping Like Damp Tires..
From Time To Time i "Stop..Stare" (No Ones Good..Haz Why You Think Niggahz Droped Here?..

What About Tha Mothers, Sibilings Lil Brothers Who Studda Hearin Gun Shotz Shuttin Shuttaz..
Feeling Like Foundation of Life is Butta Cus Dey in "Pitch Black" Like Colors on Lifeliss Cuttaz..
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

aight ill try breakin this down a bit..jj i seen that verse b4 from u but not for ne collab or nething so its str8,strongest bars ill show

i'm Always in Tha Kitchen Bakin
Fiends Out Knowin They Kids is Wakin
Jamaicans Always Throwin Hatians
So i Open Up Tha Oven Always Throwin Cake in

was pretty cool i think^,ur opening bar wasnt that bad either,overall flowed smoothly and stuck 2 the topic decently

Shaz,ur verse inperticular showed elevation in my eyes,good shit,liked this bar below

Gotta Move ya head Back & Forth Wen u Pickin Up Niggahz iz Good Flyer Boys Known Fa "Stickin Up"
I Haddah Chance To Strta Movement in da Kitchen But,I Took Value in Wud i Wus Spittin Up..

good shit^ i hear u on that..but ur whole verse wuz good'ta me

overall it wuz a cool collab,jj i thought u cudda got a lil more detailed but its ur verse so u decide whats good with it,and shaz ur on the right track lately juz stay doin u,ur doin pretty good...good job both yall,peace
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Post by Glamtrash »

Good shit, both of you. I like theone's verse better, but that might be because the layout is easier to read. Good shit still, keep doin ya thing. You're both talented.
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Dope collab.
Hazard outshined TGYH by just abit.
Flowed nice, multies were nice, Nice topic too.


TGYH Fave BARS:

When My Face Hits Tha Mirror i invision Heaven
Blow Another Line.. i Lost Count Was it Six Or Seven?

Fiends Out Knowin They Kids is Wakin
Jamaicans Always Throwin Hatians
So i Open Up Tha Oven Always Throwin Cake in
Tha Fiends is Scrapin While Tha Rock is Tastin Funny


Hazard Fave BARS:


Aint Nothin Gittin Well im Constantly Flippin Cellz Tryin To Connect Wit God Cause i " Sit in Hell"
Love Ones Diein I Pretend To Pray Cause God has No Ears He Cant Hear Me Any Ways..

Through Tha Atmosphere as Multiple Semis Spray (people pack Invisible Luggage) not Many Stay
Twistin Blunts Thinkin Bout Twisted Thoughts ..No Helping Hands only Tha " Wristliss Walk"


What About Tha Mothers, Sibilings Lil Brothers Who Studda Hearin Gun Shotz Shuttin Shuttaz..
Feeling Like Foundation of Life is Butta Cus Dey in "Pitch Black" Like Colors on Lifeliss Cuttaz..
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Can See Reality And Still Confess That i Dream <-- Liked Dis


When My Face Hits Tha Mirror i invision Heaven
Blow Another Line.. i Lost Count Was it Six Or Seven?
^^ Brought Feelin

it's Sick But i Focus On Tha Green
All My Hope is On Tha Fiends
i'm Always in Tha Kitchen Bakin
Fiends Out Knowin They Kids is Wakin
Jamaicans Always Throwin Hatians
^^^ Sick Multis Son.. & Nice Story Line..

Tha Fiends is Scrapin While Tha Rock is Tastin Funny << Caught ya Flow Eazi
i'm On Tha Grind Always Chasin Hunniez
Not A Thug i'm Just Out Ta Make Tha Money
i'll Raise Tha Fith And Let Tha Llama Rape A Monkey <<< LOL Let Tha Llama Rape A Monkey!.. LOL

Good shit Niggah
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