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Brah-Vo
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Keystyle: I Feel No Pain

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I Feel no pain im only so sane on a low day
this world grow lames, adapt so my flow change
Fuck HOES Fuck Love Fuck niggaz who cant take a hit
i wake a bitch so when the cops come knockin, i can cake a snitch
Fuck The rich nigga who live in the estate who gives his workers no breaks
the whore gets whatever the ho take i write down whatever words my flow makes
not a show stopper but i make the show shake collapse and make ya bones break
I Stop shit runnin like imodium awarded at the podium
flammable like petroleum all 4 aces im holdin em
the way i do things the way i write when i have a mood swing
it would seem the wolves come out when the hood sings
fuck the world i hate it all let it go and make it fall
emergency, the urgency ring for help and fake the call
make ya move and make no sound,pack the rounds and stake the mall, hostage situation
the killers have no patience, extreme hesitation so flip the scene to a bondage demonstration
a leather clad woman dressed in black stacks blades on another womans back
laid down on a woven rack opens up her pack and whips the woman hard making a loud CRACK
or flip the screen over when the scenes over containing the obscene obsolete queen
you know what i mean? Catch ya breath and follow me, sooth ya sore muscles with a tube of heat cream
neva fallin down, behind me i got a sweet team drop a few bars but only when the beats mean
Aka Raiza Sharp, R.A.I
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Re: Keystyle: I Feel No Pain

Post by Arvincible »

..Raiza Sharpe` wrote:
make ya move and make no sound,pack the rounds and stake the mall, hostage situation
the killers have no patience, extreme hesitation so flip the scene to a bondage demonstration
a leather clad woman dressed in black stacks blades on another womans back
laid down on a woven rack opens up her pack and whips the woman hard making a loud CRACK
or flip the screen over when the scenes over containing the obscene obsolete queen
you know what i mean? Catch ya breath and follow me, sooth ya sore muscles with a tube of heat cream
my fave part hehe

this was a nice drop considering it a keystyle, i see you've made a nice hop outside of the writer's block circle.

Anyways this part really got me picturin ur emotion, the brutality....its real dope dawg.

keep it up, there's nowhere to go but up from where yo u stand now.
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Post by Omega Bill »

Aye, good shit bud. Definetley good to see you outside that writers block. Keep writing and dont stop thinking or you'll head right back, haha. Good stuff though, this drop seemed real raw.
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Post by MesaR »

yeah good way to break out of the writers block man. hopefully them songs worked the trick ey?

i see you be elevating quickly man, this was pretty nice for the most part not really digging your structure work on it.. try making all your bars the same length or close dont wont ur verse looking like a mess.. good shit
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this was some nice shit, some elevation in this piece, yes? good shit lil homie keep droppin




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