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Post by thaphantom »

You wouldn't be hot in "The scriptures" even if you were jesus.
I know I can see the Pictures but you're trying to percieve-us.
Neither of you guys should even really try-to-ryhme.
WildBill get off your knee's so we can be eye-to-eye.
All this non-sense who wants to "Back-Shit-Up".
All I want-is you lames is to quit acting-tough.
Your whole rapping careers a dream, for us it's more of a nightmare.
All of these lines that are inbetween,you shouldn't try to fight-fair.
Who'd want to be half-of-you, shit, you're a redneck.
you'll see After-a-few, arvincible will be dead-next.
Once you've read-the-text, you'll prolly be slicing each others wrist.
Or just riding each others dicks, arv you're getting the death-affect.
Arv, Do I need to explain what that even means?
I'm "The Reaper" i'm killin' more then your dreams.
Arv would like to be in a "City Of Men" only if it was all fags.
Him and wildbill aren't "Bangers" just unless it's a males ass.
I'm at-you-two, no homo but watch me as I Smash-these-fools.
I'm tired of you faggots talkin shit there just acting-kool.
Honestly i'm asking-you.
Why do you guys both judge my apperance?
And yall call me gay, Listen-here-bitch.
I never had liked dick at all not a single day in my life.
You two need to fall back cause i'm ending this shit right.
Never said that you bit anything, But I see you're Bitting a bitch.(wildbill)
Take wildbills vagina out your mouth, Cause yall are fighting tuh live.

2nd line-Jesus can make a blindman see
5th line- Who would try to back shit up, literally yall are shit, lyrically
14th line- Tha Reaper was the first rap name i went by, arv tried to take it.
15th &16th line-city of men is a movie for 08 & the bangers part had to deal wit the city of men, because it's a "thug" type city they grew up in but, arv and bill they're both fags so you should get the point

If you want it come get it...[wasnt too serious with it..] leave feed though good or bad it dont matter...i should be doing audio shit soon so yeah
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Post by complexity »

"Your whole rapping careers a dream, for us it's more of a nightmare.
All of these lines that are inbetween,you shouldn't try to fight-fair. "

I didn't like that line. The end wasn't as powerful as it could be.

You know the personals were decent. The flow didn't have any momentum though man.

It seems like you were being careless in a few spots.

You NEED to build larger vocabulary in your pieces.

Take large words and break them down into parts for your rhymes. Use more cliches.

Don't always worry about multis, but keep rhyming.

Things like that should really help.

It wasn't bad man, but you need to step it up, if you're going to be going "rap for rap" with all these people.

I can't overlook the whole thing. I thought you had some good disses man. You just need to compound them disses with better structure.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

wat he said ^^

it was alot better then the rest i've seen tho..as far i've seen lol..
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Post by Omega Bill »

lmao.

I'm sorry, when someone disses me and it's good I'll leave them good feed, like I did Ekoms.

But listen, if you're going to go toe to toe with me, don't call me lyrically shitty when you're 10 times worse. Don't say we slit our wrists after we said that you do, that's flipping, it shows a lack of originality and having a dull and uncreative mind.

If you're gonna try and come at me when you can't even pass an English course that's a bad decision. Because with a diss this bad I can write 10 shitty ones and they'll still be better.

Yet again, don't call someone lyrically shitty and then show that you are. (back shit up)
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Lmao wild bill....you're a joke....flipping is original cause it shows you can do something better then what the other person does..anyways...everyone that battles....watch some freestyle'd battles on you tube...i'm sure u see nigga's flippin lines...that shit is cold...stfu u dun know what u talkin bout
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Post by Omega Bill »

Anyone can flip you stupid bitch.

Watch, I'll flip your whole Scripture. Guess that means I'm better than you, right?
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I didn't flip everything...i flipped what two lines... you're dumb you dont really understand what i'm saying...i guess homie.. uppin for feed....not just criticism
thanks for the feed plex and ekoms
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