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You'z a LOSER

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i Guess "Actions speak louder than words" haha


Fuc ya Gun Talk Stop Bein a Hermit Maybe ur "Shell'll" Unfol-Snail
i Ain Feelin ya Shit if u Sol-Brail u got ya "Panties ina Bunch" like dere wus a WHOLE SALE!


Go Ahead Bring ya Pad-in you'll Still get Shitted on like diaper Paddin
End um ina Sec (WAIT!) Haz-a-Add-Mins cus Fact is he got His 15 Minutes Az-a-AD-MIN!

Like 16 O's of Vics he POUNDS PILLS Cus his Site Goin DOWN HILL
Dat Whack Shit u Writin Dont SOUN iLL No Need 2 Wash ya Face Krusty us a CLOWN STILL

Have u Eva Seen PUSSY Not ya REFLECTION u Stay Runnin & Not a Election..
ya Shit is Fragile as Mice im BISON BONEZ Widda Hook Like TYSON HOMEZ..


text m-c you stay on ya computer
you ain foolin noone u lifeless loser
you aint making it like a product distrabutor


Its LUD-A-CRIS when u wus Thinkin WHO TA DISS
just Cause ya Fingers Breakin Dont Mean Haz NEW TA DIS

Doods BUGGIN OUT cus he Ugly As Fuck And looks like BUGGIN OUT
when he Wus Even his PA-SCREAMD and Tryed 2 Do his Ass like Radio RA-HEEM ( Do THE RIGHT THING)

Man fuck All da Bullshit i Ain got time To waste on ya Rusty ass
Quit Callin it a Track Nigga its a THREAD just like u..
Holla At Me Fuckin Pussy ...
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Post by complexity »

-.HaZarD.- wrote:i Guess "Actions speak louder than words" haha

*Good point. I'm glad you liked that quotable.*


Fuc ya Gun Talk Stop Bein a Hermit Maybe ur "Shell'll" Unfol-Snail
i Ain Feelin ya Shit if u Sol-Brail u got ya "Panties ina Bunch" like dere wus a WHOLE SALE!

*When I write better verses, i don't talk about using guns. So I can be taken seriously*
*The punchline was pretty decent, not much to say about that*

Go Ahead Bring ya Pad-in you'll Still get Shitted on like diaper Paddin
End um ina Sec (WAIT!) Haz-a-Add-Mins cus Fact is he got His 15 Minutes Az-a-AD-MIN!

*A nice play on words, but not overly impressive. It really doesn't say much.*

Like 16 O's of Vics he POUNDS PILLS Cus his Site Goin DOWN HILL
Dat Whack Shit u Writin Dont SOUN iLL No Need 2 Wash ya Face Krusty us a CLOWN STILL

*I was with you until the punchline*

Have u Eva Seen PUSSY Not ya REFLECTION u Stay Runnin & Not a Election..
ya Shit is Fragile as Mice im BISON BONEZ Widda Hook Like TYSON HOMEZ..

*I like the transitions. It's a cool little style*

text m-c you stay on ya computer
you ain foolin noone u lifeless loser
you aint making it like a product distrabutor

*distributor*


Its LUD-A-CRIS when u wus Thinkin WHO TA DISS
just Cause ya Fingers Breakin Dont Mean Haz NEW TA DIS

*word*

Doods BUGGIN OUT cus he Ugly As Fuck And looks like BUGGIN OUT
when he Wus Even his PA-SCREAMD and Tryed 2 Do his Ass like Radio RA-HEEM ( Do THE RIGHT THING)

*funny*

Man fuck All da Bullshit i Ain got time To waste on ya Rusty ass
Quit Callin it a Track Nigga its a THREAD just like u..
Holla At Me Fuckin Pussy ...
*Maybe I write my shit to a beat, would that make it track like*?

Now, the problem we are facing. Though, honestly, I would love to take credit. And say, them
were some fire subliminals in my drop. (and i can see where your confusion is). I really can't.

Don't get it twisted. I'm not afraid of you in any shape or form, but this "beef" has went on way to long and
I'm not attempting to restart it. Put more heat under the fire if you will.

I had no subliminals in that piece. I addressed some specific issues that had nothing to do with you.

So, don't try to diminish the piece and leave feedback. Peace!
Last edited by complexity on Mon Feb 25, 2008 6:35 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by Omega Bill »

I don't a problem with who you were mentioning, haha, but I'll leave feed.


For a subliminal the punches and personals were fire. Flowed seemed off at times.

i Ain Feelin ya Shit if u Sol-Brail u got ya "Panties ina Bunch" like dere wus a WHOLE SALE!


Like 16 O's of Vics he POUNDS PILLS Cus his Site Goin DOWN HILL


Favorite lines. Good shit.
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Post by complexity »

The subliminals we speak of are apparently in my piece.
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Like 16 O's of Vics he POUNDS PILLS Cus his Site Goin DOWN HILL
Dat Whack Shit u Writin Dont SOUN iLL No Need 2 Wash ya Face Krusty us a CLOWN STILL

Have u Eva Seen PUSSY Not ya REFLECTION u Stay Runnin & Not a Election..
ya Shit is Fragile as Mice im BISON BONEZ Widda Hook Like TYSON HOMEZ..


think that wuz ur hardest bars^good shit tho man,flow wuz consistent as usual
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Overall was a nice piece.
Flow was abit awkward, which is a first for you hazard.
Subliminals were nice, punches were iight, multis were cool too.
Overall a pretty good piece. keep dropping
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Post by Arvincible »

uhh i didnt know who you were talking about at first lol

This is a pretty decent diss man, the bison bones line was the best

you are still consistent with your metas and wordplay, im glas to see that

But the sad thing about this is that plex probably wont reply. heh

Keep up the good work buddy.
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Post by complexity »

Arvincible wrote:uhh i didnt know who you were talking about at first lol

This is a pretty decent diss man, the bison bones line was the best

you are still consistent with your metas and wordplay, im glas to see that

But the sad thing about this is that plex probably wont reply. heh

Keep up the good work buddy.
The sadder thing, is he is saying the same shit, he said during our year beef. And that's not to his fault, because the beef was done and over with. People can read archives, if they want to know, who got the best of it.
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Post by Haz »

First Off. Dat Shit wus When i Wus a Newbie^ Soo Take All da Pride u Want in it
& Stop Freepostin in My Thread u Fuckin Faggot
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Post by Cee4 »

this was a decent diss. plenty of punchlines here. the flow was good too

Have u Eva Seen PUSSY Not ya REFLECTION u Stay Runnin & Not a Election..
ya Shit is Fragile as Mice im BISON BONEZ Widda Hook Like TYSON HOMEZ..

^^^^
dope bar. this was my favourite from the verse

Go Ahead Bring ya Pad-in you'll Still get Shitted on like diaper Paddin
End um ina Sec (WAIT!) Haz-a-Add-Mins cus Fact is he got His 15 Minutes Az-a-AD-MIN!

^^^^
this one was funny too


this beef with Plex is kinda draggin on a bit but this was still pretty dope
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