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The Wake Up Call

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I've seen reality, I've faced the truth
avoided insanity in the days my youth
blinded for hospitality,
focusin on keeping the right mentalilty
hard and rough so cats gon respect me
I don't need anyone here to protect me
I'ma ranger, homie - a soldier, ya know me
And I told ya, I'd make it, no need to fake it
Cause ya'll know, this shit is real
No use in deliverin ya appeal
If ya feel offended, Then u don't want to look
Forward to when this shit's ended
No discussion, u'll listen and
I'll leave ya head wit a concussion
Bars so explosive, nations use em as missiles
Blowin up the scene, like when i do my freestyle
So hilarious that I make bin laden smile
Cause they love me from north to tha south
from tha east to tha west, a beast on a lyrical quest
straight outta of Bergen
droppin wit the perfection of a surgeon
no one know exactly what'll emerge and
blow ya brains out on the curve
while ya homies laughin at ya, damn, YOU GOT SERVED
cause what u get homie, yeeah – that's what u deserve

My first posting on this site....hope ya'll like it;)
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Post by complexity »

This was decent man. The scheme started out pretty sick. Got a little more simple as the flow went on. And a few words just don't rhyme in text . though u might able to do it in audio, like missels and freestyle. Though I'd be impressed to get that one to work.

Overall this was pretty decent. Better then a lot of newbs dropping on this site. Keep it up.
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

it depends how u say missle.. like miss-ohl or miss "isle"... over all it was decent tho
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True
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Yeah it was a good piece any chance you do audio and wanna fix this on audio? I'd be looking forward for that.
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EkomS wrote:it depends how u say missle.. like miss-ohl or miss "isle"... over all it was decent tho
lol mr speech impetement...LOL...j/p...yeah dats exactly how ud get it to work...and it does..i tried..haha



yeah it was a pretty decent drop da first half i thought was pretty straight...keep it up
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thanks....appreciate ya feedback!

Ima try and do it in audio, gotta get my self a mike first though..gotta start makin some money..LOL
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lol yeah dats wat im thinkin along wit da whole AME family...shit aint easy tho....unless u got a connection wit a mainstream producer er some shit...lol like hulk hogans daughter got it EASY...oh ill have my dad call so n so and bam talk to em send a demo and oh they like it...lets go to da studio and RECORD!..lol fuckin gay
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But consider it like this. I'll bet they have lost more money then they've made for brooke. With how bad everything she has done has flopped.
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True complexity... some cats just aren't made fo makin music...like k-fed...damn, he was wack as hell..=/
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Post by precise »

yea, definately a nice drop, especially for someone new to the site, congrats, about the whole "missile" thing everyone was talkin about lmao, when you readin it, the way its spelled you tend to think "miss-ill" sorta when yer readin, but in audio itd be more like miss-ILE cause you could rhyme "style" with "ILE" on audio, anyways, keep elevatin,

and ummmm, hulk hogans doughter does music? never heard her before
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yer that was good man
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PrecisE wrote:and ummmm, hulk hogans doughter does music? never heard her before
She does, I don't know about an album, but she recorded a single
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fuck man, even Paris Hilton did a fuckin song with some rap fuck. and she blows. (literally and musically) lol hogans daughter blows Paris out the fuckin water! cause the girls got talent. she just needs to find her light and needs to choose a different Genre of music, cause the teeny-bop Radio Disney BSB N'Sync shits played out like hell!!!
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Re: The Wake Up Call

Post by precise »

B-Bear wrote: blow ya brains out on the curve
its not curve, its CURB!!

donno how i let that slip last time i read this, i always correct people when they say curve insteada curb haha, peace
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