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Serial Killer Series - Albert Fish

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Born a freak, relatives were unique, attention he seeked, thought he was a creep
Motives were to steep, dad died at 5, and until he was eleven he pissed his sheets
Grew up got married, and his wife would creep around and sleep without a sound
With other men, had em locked in her den, Albert didnt take kindly to this when
He found out she was a whore, kicked her out the door, didnt know what was in store
With his mind at the time, 1910 committed his first crime, knew who would do time
Cops couldnt find, what this madman did, wouldnt speak, how they gonna catch a mime
Crazy aint nice, he would scream I'M CHRIST, shake his fist and rock back n forth at night
Blinded not right, walking with no bright sight, mind darkened so there would be no light
With himself hed fight, obsessed with sin, suffering, atonement and pain, guys insane
Dudes seein red, hed make his children and their friends whip his ass till it bled
Hed never go to bed, Albert was constantly sick, he used to take needles and stick em up his dick
29 needles counted legit, none could they pass, soak cotton balls in alcohol light em on fire in his ass
Over 20 sexual pervisions used as an excursion bit, fetishes like crazy most disgusting was he eats shit
This aint fake its all written, ya probably grimacin as ya sittin, readin all about this crazy insane cretin
Hopefully ye aint eatin, because the parts comin up is worse than a beatin so my advice is take a seat in
That chair of yours and keep attention on me, look out for these drops homie this is just Part 1 of 3



If you dont believe what Im writing Ill give you a link.
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Post by Subsist »

Stop writing round 2 shit alright?. Live with your loss. Even if you won harle you wouldnt win this. The most important point is that you are not allowed to participate in the tourny anyways. How can you run a tourny and decide the topics and actually participate in it. I see you have a verse ready which means you've possibly been cheating.

If you post more stuff about serial killers you will confuse us, please dont.
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Post by Omega Bill »

I just wrote that 10 minutes ago. Swear on my fucking life. You can fucking ask Ghost and Arvincible I havent been cheating. Ghost helped me with the topics for Round 1 on what they were gonna be and Ive been bitching to Arv how I couldnt write my verse for round 1 and it turned out shitty.

Before you go accusin people of shit do your homework homie. If you wanna one on one topical battle me you'll get fucking worked.

Check how many bars that is Subsist. It's MORE than 6 so how was it written for the tourney? and the fact Im doing 3 parts would also give off a hint that theres no way it was written for the tourney. Get a clue.
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Post by Haz »

With his mind at the time, 1910 committed his first crime, knew who would do time
Cops couldnt find, what this madman did, wouldnt speak, how they gonna catch a mime < Sick Line
Crazy aint nice, he would scream I'M CHRIST, shake his fist and rock back n forth at night <Krazy
Blinded not right, walking with no bright sight, mind darkened so there would be no light

Flow was On point, you got real descriptive, i Like how detailed you Were


29 needles counted legit, none could they pass, soak cotton balls in alcohol light em on fire in his ass
Over 20 sexual pervisions used as an excursion bit, fetishes like crazy most disgusting was he eats shit

Lmao U Got Gross in da Bar, Real Detailed Lmao good flow


This aint fake its all written, ya probably grimacin as ya sittin, readin all about this crazy insane cretin
Hopefully ye aint eatin, because the parts comin up is worse than a beatin so my advice is take a seat in
That chair of yours and keep attention on me, look out for these drops homie this is just Part 1 of 3

Nice Way To Close it, u Closed it with a Basic Overrall of the Situation & a Nice flow..

Good shit Keeep Droppin These Types of Pieces

Try To use A Little more Metaphors here And there though
to make the flow a lil better
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Post by Arvincible »

lol this is just a frustration verse for ya

I just hope nobody gets albert fisher because u already said a lot about him.
I thought it was going to be like jason, freddy, and michael meyers, but bleh

anyways great opening bar

Born a freak, relatives were unique, attention he seeked, thought he was a creep
Motives were to steep, dad died at 5, and until he was eleven he pissed his sheets


this entire drop was very vivid and...well disgusting


Hed never go to bed, Albert was constantly sick, he used to take needles and stick em up his dick
29 needles counted legit, none could they pass, soak cotton balls in alcohol light em on fire in his ass


omg that's just like you lol jk gross

This really proved to be psychotic and it showed the readers how he was so insane. Real nice

This is a good example of what everyone should try to do in round two hehe good stuff bill keep it up
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Post by Brah-Vo »

A very interesting, original topic idea.

I like it.
Flow is improving, imagery was dope here
Multis are nice
You've improved alot bill.

Favorite piece from you.
Shit was dope.

Nice work my dude.
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