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What You Didn't Have To Be

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What You Didn't Have To Be

Post by Glamtrash »

For my Grandfather.


You never had to do it, yet it never crossed your mind
Your words of wisdom said strategically, your smiles sweet and kind.
You never saw the difference between Glen, myself, and Laura-Lee
We were all equal in your eyes; we were all your family
You never chastised the way I dressed or the sad songs I would sing
And I still wear on my hand our Japanese friendship ring
You taught me a lot of what you knew and yet still let me fly
You put band-aids on my cuts and scrapes and wiped the tears that I would cry
You never yelled or dished out trouble even when you were upset with me
I'll never be able thank you enough for being what you didn't have to be

You told me I danced like an angel, even when I fell
And that things always worked themselves out, "only time will tell"
You said for me to do my best and be the best person I could be
Because even when I wasn't watching, Laura looked up to me.
And now I sit beside myself, I close my eyes and I reflect
On all the times you didn't think of what to do or what came next
You did for us without second thought like what you've done for others
Actions and beliefs instilled by you will make me a better mother
Its sad you'll never see the outcome of what you've done for me
But it all began by you being what you didn't have to be

Even though it was your time and you couldn't stay and chat
Know what I've been taught will stick with me and I'll frequently look back
I'll think about the time you spent and the laughter that we shared
Knowing in my heart of hearts it was true you always cared
The only regret I have is you'll never know what it means to me
To have so many memories of you being what you didn't have to be
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Post by Meta-the-DEMON »

Beautiful. No multies or mind-bending imagery or any of those bells and whistles but still beautiful. I'm very ADD when it comes to stuff with basic rhyme schemes... but you were able to keep my attention, keep me interested and evoke emotions in me. So damn, props.
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Post by Omega Bill »

To be completely honest my eyes got a little cloudy reading this. This drop is as real as it gets, and I can really ralate to something like this.

Beautiful piece. Liked everything about it. It was also very moving and touching. I enjoyed reading this, a lot.

I'm gonna have to start getting back into poems because you're running away with this board! Haha.
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Graceful.
Elegant yet rough, and harsh.

That's i describe your style.

I aint a pussy but shit almost brought a tear to my eye.
I actually closed my door stopped my music and read this slowly.
Brought back alot of memories for me.
And probably alot more for you.

Wonderful job.
Thank you for bringing this shit to illest LMAO!
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Post by Kurse »

Awesome from beginning to end.
Everyword.
Reminded me of my grandmother who passed in Aug. of '06, which is who I wrote my verse for when I dropped that recent track "In The Rain".

Though I never took my grandmama for granted, sometimes u can't help but to think that you didn't see them enough, or talk to them enough. You tend to really miss the water that the well once had, even if it hasn't completely run dry.

That's what I appreciate most about ur drops Dub, you really help a man and his emotions focus.
Keep doin ur thang mami.
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Post by Momeijah »

Kurse wrote:Though I never took my grandmama for granted, sometimes u can't help but to think that you didn't see them enough, or talk to them enough. You tend to really miss the water that the well once had, even if it hasn't completely run dry.
Haha Took The Words Right Out Of My Mouth Dude.

This Was Good, i Read it While Listening To Megadeth, They Were Almost in Sync.

But Really it Was Pretty Accurate With The Whole Never Living To See How Much You've Grown Up Etc. i Can Relate To That Quite a Bit. Every Line Had Something To Say.

You never had to do it, yet it never crossed your mind <--- This Was Probably My Favourite, Sums The Whole Thing Up Because it's Not Like They're Our Parents But They Still Have That instinct Shit.

Good Shit Keep Dropping.
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

Shanda..what can i say,another nice drop,i was feelin this alot cuz i lost my grandpa a few months back..but yea this wuz definetly nice,good description,glad ta see u dropped again in ur spare time,when my pc isnt messin up we'll have ta collab again on'a serious note lol loved this piece tho drop more
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Post by complexity »

It's brave to write such a bitter sweet poem.

What you learned from your grandfather will be with you forever.

Therefore he will be.

His kindness and love for you wasn't required but it is to be admired and everyone of us should take away something from this poem.

People die, but love doesn't.

And his positive impact on your life will make a positive impact on all the peoples lives that you touch with that same quality.
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Post by Glamtrash »

Thanks Krimbo.

Thank you to the rest of you as well, and I'm sorry for your losses.
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Post by Arvincible »

wow.... this was so emotionally packed.
every line was filled with a moving tone.
i enjoyed this read a lot, and i really felt ya throughout the entire piece.
great stuff. I cant rate poems but if i could i would give it a 9/10.

keep writing girl
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