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Haz
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Reememba like a Split.Crew Diss Me and im Comin 2 Git.You jus Chill Sit.Veiw
As u in Fractionz get Crackd like u got 3/5th's & Hit Two i Do da "Fixin" like a Kit Do
Fistz iz Potent u Hurt? Shit.Sue The Stack u Gettin outa Me Get as Large as a Shitsue
u Aimed shotz..i'll sarcastically Say da shoe "Fit Who" Den Grab a Arm Neva Lettin go like PITZ DO
seperate ya bones Till i Levatate ya Dome Devastate ya Clone u "Anerexic" Neva ate Da Chrome?
Doods Claim a Punchline Title They "Trippin Hard" Still Taken Shots Maxin Out a "Sippin Card"
u Soft English Muffin u Ain "Flippin Hard", u Rest-in-Fords "Pissin yaself" like a Active Intest-in-Cord
Havin No Bath.Room Wid "Garbage Rhymes" dat have No "Bath..Room" Feel My Wrath Soon
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

Fistz iz Potent u Hurt? Shit.Sue The Stack u Gettin outa Me Get as Large as a Shitsue
u Aimed shotz..i'll sarcastically Say da shoe "Fit Who" Den Grab a Arm Neva Lettin go like PITZ DO

think that wuz ur hardest bar^,2 shorttttttt lol,but it wuz a cool lil read,and start doin what u said u wuz gona do on aim,but newayz the flow wuz good,and ur tryna use some diff vocab which iz nice too,keep it p
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Post by Arvincible »

yo tell the truth this is my least fave from you haz.

I liked the same bars that the two above me liked the most but other than
that. the new period in between words to create multis didnt really do well
in this piece. but yeah, the word play was mediocre and metas were weak.
It seemed like u just wanted to post something real quick lol take this as
constructive criticism, i know u'll bounce back wit something hard man.
Keep it comin, peace..
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