Fuck a copy and paste

[Arvincible]

U home alone so u callin up ya crew the 'Homo-zone'
Hangin like a faggot retard cuz u got extra chromosomes,
With all ur 'missed disses', I be 4ever bombin im-biciles
With xplosive syl-lables, this shit is a Diss-Missile, wit whip-pistols

See there's no-gettin-me, even wit excess weaponry
Fuck the mental metal u claim an uppercut aimed n u heavenly
God blessin-me so there's no testin-me, its my destiny
To destroy tan white or ebony with what's the best-of-me

Now its evident u hesitant, give props n get shot like the new president
Ironic how im heaven sent but im raging hell so its irrelevant
Im ravenous, aint man enough 4 a closet so ill toss u in the cabinets
Grabbin ya throat and im-stabbin-it, egotists? notice I aint-havin-it

All of Those who idol me just try creating rivalries
U hurtin silently, like pain in ya brain just go try n midol-me
Violently, I'll twist the knife that's caught-in-ya-leg
Im Offin-ya-head, so fuck love lemme offer u a coffin-instead

Im stompin the threads, rusty vets'll get tossed in a shed
il handcuff ya bitch n then she callin me a cop in the bed,
Lose ya feelins, gun-claps, cold hearted the numb grasped
Helps the mac un-strap, u like a x-mas present u un-rapped

And Fuck a peace treaty, I take it all cuz i be greedy
Got More beef and niggas beg on their knees to "please feed me"
Believe me, kindness is deceiving, ill leave you bleeding
Rip ya chest apart, take ya heart, staple it on the ceiling

Like a damn pimple on ya bitch ill simply pop-in-ya-face
This is how u truly go off-in-a-page, so fuck a copy-n-paste...

[Arvincible]

uppin for feed

[Brah-Vo]

thought this shit was dope.
Nice multis, punches were nice.
Flow was dope as usual.

Keep up.

[thaphantom]

actually i give you some props on this...arv...this shit was dope...but out of curiosity...who were you dissing?

[Arvincible]

some real feed would be appreciated

[Cee4]

U home alone so u callin up ya crew the 'Homo-zone'
Hangin like a faggot retard cuz u got extra chromosomes,
With all ur 'missed disses', I be 4ever bombin im-biciles
With xplosive syl-lables, this shit is a Diss-Missile, wit whip-pistols
didn't like this. I was feelin the homo-zone bit. The second half of it didn't rhyme fluently to me. Possibly coz we got different accents I dunno

See there's no-gettin-me, even wit excess weaponry
Fuck the mental metal u claim an uppercut aimed n u heavenly
God blessin-me so there's no testin-me, its my destiny
To destroy tan white or ebony with what's the best-of-me
This was pretty dope. Nice multis and flow

Now its evident u hesitant, give props n get shot like the new president
Ironic how im heaven sent but im raging hell so its irrelevant
This flowed really well. It was a solid bar with nice rhyming throughout it. I dunno what your talkin about getting shot like the new president though. I presume your talkin about Obama. No1 he aint been shot. No2 he aint even won the democrat election yet then he has another election after that so I don't know what your talkin about here.
Im ravenous, aint man enough 4 a closet so ill toss u in the cabinets
Grabbin ya throat and im-stabbin-it, egotists? notice I aint-havin-it
I liked the first line. Aint Man enough for a cabinet lol
2nd line was alright. Decent multis


All of Those who idol me just try creating rivalries
U hurtin silently, like pain in ya brain just go try n midol-me
Violently, I'll twist the knife that's caught-in-ya-leg
Im Offin-ya-head, so fuck love lemme offer u a coffin-instead
Again this was Ok. The midol bit was dope. I wasn't feelin the second half

Im stompin the threads, rusty vets'll get tossed in a shed
il handcuff ya bitch n then she callin me a cop in the bed,
Decent multis and flow. I dunno about the cop in the bed shit though
Lose ya feelins, gun-claps, cold hearted the numb grasped
Helps the mac un-strap, u like a x-mas present u un-rapped
Pretty good. Nice wordplay, multis and flow again

And Fuck a peace treaty, I take it all cuz i be greedy
Got More beef and niggas beg on their knees to "please feed me"
Not feeling this. Not much of a punch here but again solid with the flow and multis
Believe me, kindness is deceiving, ill leave you bleeding
Rip ya chest apart, take ya heart, staple it on the ceiling
Again the flow and multis were the best thing about this. I wasn't feelin the staple your heart on the ceiling. You could have been more creative than this

Like a damn pimple on ya bitch ill simply pop-in-ya-face
This is how u truly go off-in-a-page, so fuck a copy-n-paste...
Nice closer. Good wordplay, multis and flow


Overall this piece was average. As usual you nailed the flow and the multis. You coulda got more creative here. The punches did not hit hard for the most part. You had some nice wordplay though. It kinda seemed like you were just trying to fit in as many words that rhymed. Don't get me wrong it was decent but it was far from your best work. 6.7890657/10 lol

[Arvincible]

lmao thanks man i appreciate the feed.

[Haz]

God blessin-me so there's no testin-me, its my destiny
To destroy tan white or ebony with what's the best-of-me

dis Wus good on the multi Side & Wud wus above it



All of Those who idol me just try creating rivalries
U hurtin silently, like pain in ya brain just go try n midol-me
Violently, I'll twist the knife that's caught-in-ya-leg
Im Offin-ya-head, so fuck love lemme offer u a coffin-instead
^^^ Dis Wus da Best Lil Segment to Me.

Anyways This Wus Alright a
5/10 Because Alot Of Stuff Just Seemed Forced like Cee Sed 3 Different Times..
its Far From your Best Potential ..

[Cee4]

lol just noticed i posted that 3 times. wtf

[Arvincible]

can i get more feed? thanks

[Omega Bill]

You told me it was an off the top Keystyle. For an off the top keystyle, this piece was nice.

Your other pieces I'm sure you sat down and wrote, and that's why those obviously outshine an off the top piece.

That's why I'm going to compare it to that.

Structure was nice, it's hard structuring off the top sometimes, multis were nice, some seemed a little forced by they were good. Decent punches, especially for a subliminal off the dome, this was nice, and he probably won't even know it's about him, haha.

7/10. Wasn't you best, but it wasn't bad either.

[complexity]

For an off the top it was pretty nice.

"Violently, I'll twist the knife that's caught-in-ya-leg
Im Offin-ya-head, so fuck love lemme offer u a coffin-instead "

Favorite bar.

But overall a lot of filler. And so-so bars.

"See there's no-gettin-me, even wit excess weaponry
Fuck the mental metal u claim an uppercut aimed n u heavenly
God blessin-me so there's no testin-me, its my destiny
To destroy tan white or ebony with what's the best-of-me "

I don't find anything interesting about that.

"Im stompin the threads, rusty vets'll get tossed in a shed
il handcuff ya bitch n then she callin me a cop in the bed, (uh)
Lose ya feelins, gun-claps, cold hearted the numb grasped
Helps the mac un-strap, u like a x-mas present u un-rapped " (bad closer)

Nice Rhyming.

Overall, I have mixed feels, but for a keystyle it works for me.

[Arvincible]

thanks for the feed guys imma work harder and put something more meaningful up next time lol