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Invincible
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I'm new to this site so allow me to introduce myself//
just another lyricist to arrange on your trophy shelf//

I'm higher than a pothead flying Delta Airline//
Stopping time for emcees who already comsumed this flatline//

I'll demolish and seperate your rhymes like a cotton gin//
For I am a lyrical sorcerous a fairy tale by Han Andersen//
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MesaR
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Post by MesaR »

Not bad..i liked your first Line ur 2nd and 3rd was ok not bad thou keep it upp!
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by complexity »

hmm. Needs to be a lot longer. The lines were terrible, but they weren't very good either. Keep it up!
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Post by drunken jesus »

showed some potential with the wordplay, just work on elevating your rhyme schemes

overall not a bad piece for a short introduction
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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