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Haz
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i Dont "Give a Fuck About you" use liss skeets
Keep runnin like mathheads u gota Use-ya-Feet
I'm The Nicest on Hea wid Audio i Ain tryna Abuse-a-Seat
Yall Doods Starvin For Skill & Will Neva Choose-2-Eat
So u Cant Handle u & Sendin Mini yous 2 Throw-a-Shot
you Like Numbaz? 16 Exact i'll Make sure ya Throw-is-Hot
Here go'z da Plot Analize Den Destroy the Flow u Jot
u a King? No-U-Not it ain Nothin 2 Dump u ina "PAWN"
soul wise, Rap wise i'll Just dump ya ina grassless LAWN
Veteran Poppin Medicine cus a Youngin Among Him
Who'll Ship a "Animal" To Da Vet You Culd Bet
i'll Put a Beast out Commision Quick Listen Prick
i'll Have Ya Lines Gone Like a Missin Brick
u Take Advice ona Mission Tip But'll neva get signd like a Missin Permission-Slip
When u Spittin-Slip up & Admit its Writtin-Lip u Buyin a Box a Pens Gittin-Tips
Mixin it ina Verse now u Gotta Packd Gun? My Nuts Bitch..Kiss a Sack Son
For Bait Dey Use a Tackle dont Become a (Sack Dun)
Cus Den u cant Ack-Nun Layin Down Ina Sack..Done..
Demented brain Presented Rain..Storm of bitches Whoz teeth'll get Dented Mayne
Claimin Tha Hazard Wack u'll "Pay For these Tracks" Like a Rented Train
Ocean Rappaz Wash-in-Tons like D-C. wack C.D.'z Dey shuld Be-Free
Caging thoughts i'll Free-Frees Like a Mistress Try N See-Me
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-TraMaTiK-
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

i'll Put a Beast out Commision Quick Listen Prick
i'll Have Ya Lines Gone Like a Missin Brick
u Take Advice ona Mission Tip But'll neva get signd like a Missin Permission-Slip
When u Spittin-Slip up & Admit its Writtin-Lip u Buyin a Box a Pens Gittin-Tips
Mixin it ina Verse now u Gotta Packd Gun? My Nuts Bitch..Kiss a Sack Son
For Bait Dey Use a Tackle dont Become a (Sack Dun)
Cus Den u cant Ack-Nun Layin Down Ina Sack..Done..

liked that part the most^ ur flow kinda got a lil sloppy towards the end but it wasnt horrible,multis were good,if u cud fix up the flow maybe re-word some bars it'll be smoother,but keep droppin
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Post by Cee4 »

this was pretty good. nice punchlines and wordplay as usual. like tramtik said your flow fell off a bit at the end but it was still a good verse. your at your best when you stick to the simple but effective wordplay and punchlines.

i Dont "Give a Fuck About you" use liss skeets
Keep runnin like mathheads u gota Use-ya-Feet
I'm The Nicest on Hea wid Audio i Ain tryna Abuse-a-Seat
Yall Doods Starvin For Skill & Will Neva Choose-2-Eat
So u Cant Handle u & Sendin Mini yous 2 Throw-a-Shot
you Like Numbaz? 16 Exact i'll Make sure ya Throw-is-Hot
Here go'z da Plot Analize Den Destroy the Flow u Jot

this was my favourite part of the verse.
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