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Here I am

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My hearts near 'red line' as I'm writing this rhyme ||
If Life was only as simple as Mike Jones, during this time ||
I'd loan a knife from my wrist, n start typing poems ||
all this fighting at home, its not right, my parents are pissed ||
cuz I'm writing my experience, through the Illest Lyrics ||
My past writtens used as mirrors, seeing my old apperance ||
Dealing with my own incoherence, with my ambigious spirit ||
being my only interferance, livin my life through clear tints ||
at another glimpse, tonight what i 'saw' was more of shock n aw ||
didn't seem real, it truely made me envy a blind man ||
even he could see thru me, the fear in my hand it was defying ||
the kool g inside me dieng, my negative perspective prying ||
Looking To be respected, crying, its like reading a eulogy ||
with a death wish, my neglected thoughts had turned into a method ||
that wasn't calm or collected, it was the bomb injected ||
The Evil Geniuses went wrong, with the message of Sadaam ||
i wrote the type of song, that makes you want to call ya mom ||
an octagon of thoughts so strong, that were more domestic all along ||
The saigon of my creation, never noticed, too focused ||
I layed-on the floor, n started realizing everything I'd later endured ||
in retrospect it was a cure, because before i was a Wh0re ||
to myself, now my health, is scorned by the way I always felt ||
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complexity wrote:didn't seem real, it truely made me envy a blind man ||
even he could see thru me, the fear in my hand it was defying ||
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

shit was sick man, a lotta feelin in that drop, keepin it real but i wasnt sure about callin yourself a whore but other than that "flawless". keep at it.

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Post by B-Bear »

U callin ya self a man ho?? haha..just playin homez

Shit was tight, not on ya usual level when it comes to the rhymes and multies, but the content covered that up real good!!

All in all a very nice drop homez!!
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Thanks for the feed.
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Post by Invincible »

It was all good man the best work I have seen here yet. I just think you could have done without this "i wrote the type of song, that makes you want to call ya mom || "
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