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Cee4
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Quick Little Story

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She was a bright girl with pasion, she had a hunger for things
But she got hooked on drugs, her dealer took her under his wing
She thought their love was everlastin, she wanna seal it with a kiss
But he`d rather be her dealer and her pimp, he see her as a bitch
Got her workin the street, she starts her shift when day n dark meet
Its her only way to eat, no way out and it hurts with every heartbeat
Now the smack got her hooked, so now she gotta steal to shift debts
Her self respects been took, on the corner in high heels and fishnets
She got pregnant n wanna keep it, now the pimp wanna give threats
She ran back to mama, he`s mad, wanna know where his bitch went
Swears he`ll kill her if see her, her mama don't give a fuck either
Remembers her girl, she cant believe this dumb slut could be her
She gotta live with her choices, cant deal with her daughters pain
Says she brought her shame, embarrassed this broad got her name
Now shes drunk in the street, with a wrap of smack and a fetus
It's a cold world, she wishes she could go back n just leave this
She gets to the bridge, then hits the water, havin visions of leavin
But two days later she wakes up, n a machines assistin her breathin
Fluid in her lungs but she made it, situation aint cool but she's stable
But she wishes it was fatal, so with her last act she pulls out the cable…
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Post by MesaR »

pretty cool drop cee4, good to see you around keep dropping i'll look out for your next couple of drops.

topic i wasnt really feeling but you did it pretty well, i dont know how much experience and shit you know with it but still it was nice

She thought their love was everlastin, she wanna seal it with a kiss
But he`d rather be her dealer and her pimp, he see her as a bitch

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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

It was a Koo Little Tale ..
Coulda Been a Little More Creative ..
But Everythin Else Was Pretty Much Good ..
Umm I Had a Problem Wit Threats and Went Rhymin Tho ..
It Kinda Threw Off Tha Rhyme Scheme ..
Props Tho ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by Cee4 »

thanks for the feed. it was just a quick little story.
and sequence ive had no experience of being a drug addicted, suicidal female prostitute lol
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