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You can shape and mold me in your head so you can truely see what ya wanna see
A wise man once told me, listen to yourself, so please wont you just let me be me
Just let me be free, with no chains holding me down in the rain with my clothes drippin
Of water and I keep limping through life cause I cant keep grippin on whats worth livin
Cant seem to fit-in to what societies given, we all have a plan, but mines not quite written
Its like theres no light when Im sittin, thinkin, bout how my buttons are pushed to the brink n
I cant comprehend when you try to lend a hand that you're just saving me from my own sinkin
But Im my own link-in the chain of the universe, but Ill admit that you were the first
To see my souls goals inside me to reach out and find what the future holds as memories unfold
Most were just letting me be cold, no one offered their hospitality, I was jus a minor technicality
I realized my own mind was jailin me, and my weaknesses are like a shadow thats tailin me
My former selfs dreamlessness bailing, and I'm no longer failing to issue my own decree
Dab my eyes with a tissue, my old self, Im going to miss you, sorry but this is whats best for me
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Post by Glamtrash »

I like it. Real shit.

Dab my eyes with a tissue, my old self, Im going to miss you, sorry but this is whats best for me

*That stood out the most. Brilliant closer.

I'll do this way better when i have more time.
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Thank you.
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Post by complexity »

Yah, this was pretty cool man.

"Of water and I keep limping through life cause I cant keep grippin on whats worth livin
Cant seem to fit-in to what societies given, we all have a plan, but mines not quite written "

Lots of dope metaphors throughout the drop that kept my interest.

The closer was real nice too.

Keep it up.
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You can shape and mold me in your head so you can truely see what ya wanna see
A wise man once told me, listen to yourself, so please wont you just let me be me

WOOOOW.. i jus Read da First Bar N i GOtta Paste It LMAO.. That shit wus jus wow.
"Mold me in your head so you can truely see what ya wanna see".. < Hit Nice

Its like theres no light when Im sittin, thinkin, bout how my buttons are pushed to the brink n
I cant comprehend when you try to lend a hand that you're just saving me from my own sinkin
But Im my own link-in the chain of the universe, but Ill admit that you were the first
To see my souls goals inside me to reach out and find what the future holds as memories unfold
Most were just letting me be cold, no one offered their hospitality, I was jus a minor technicality

GOOOOD DAMN BILL MAN.... U be Goin Tough In ya Scripts Son... like That Shit^ is jus Nice as Hell
Complex... Reall... Feelin.. Good Lyrics...ya Experience... Everythin u Need 2 Have in it..

I realized my own mind was jailin me, and my weaknesses are like a shadow thats tailin me < DEEP..
My former selfs dreamlessness bailing, and I'm no longer failing to issue my own decree
Dab my eyes with a tissue, my old self, Im going to miss you, sorry but this is whats best for me
^^ Dat Wus a Great Way To Close it Man.. No Bullshit u Sorta Moved Me a Lil Bit wid Dis..
Got Chills N shit.. Noones Done Dat On Here LOL.. Atleast 2 Me.. No homo...

Good Shit SOn Fa'real 10 Outta Motha fuckin 10...
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Thanks for all the feed. Much appreciated.
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

i like it, its got a fort minor kinda thing going with it
even tho i already read this on AIM, i can still tell u
its good again and im glad u took my advice on changing a few things
dont know why u posted in the scrips, when this definitely a DC

But Im my own link-in the chain of the universe, but Ill admit that you were the first << dont really like that line but the rest was on point
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Post by Dead Silence »

damn man.your an emotional kinda guy arnt you?that shit had a lot of feeling behind it.
i felt this one real good and thats what a rapper should do and u did it

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Cant seem to fit-in to what societies given, we all have a plan, but mines not quite written
^best line in the whole thing in my eyes

Most were just letting me be cold, no one offered their hospitality, I was jus a minor technicality
I realized my own mind was jailin me, and my weaknesses are like a shadow thats tailin me
My former selfs dreamlessness bailing, and I'm no longer failing to issue my own decree
Dab my eyes with a tissue, my old self, Im going to miss you, sorry but this is whats best for me
^that was a grandslam closer

over all
9.5 out of 10

good shit man
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