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Young K
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Post by Young K »

i should be making an audio with this so ill post that when its finished...should be bangin

AAO, ayo what the odds be, we make tracks drop bombs, imma kamakaze.
Watch over head, over seas, over fields, im a monster baby, fresh out of cloverfield.
Flows sick, no shit, so sick, yellow fever, black death epidemic, hello ether.
Let me talk my shit, or be shitted upon, i drop bombs, bombs, bombs, bombs, and more bombs.
Im, a soulja, whos marching for the cause, so so fly, got me defying newtons laws.
Fuck'em all, horror like amityville, fly, whats in my way of space, gravitys field.
King of this jungle, imma young Tarzan, flows out of this world, imma imma martian.
Make it rain, like theres a leak in the roof, yall talking to me, but am i speaking to yous.
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Post by B-Bear »

Didn't get the rhyme scheme at all - really confusing!

But I could see this one being recorded - has more of a audio flow to it, how come every piece I comment upon tonight seems to be similar to an Eminem type flow.. lol

If this was suppose to be a written, ur makin some stupid mistakes - never repeat words over again like:

"i drop bombs, bombs, bombs, bombs, and more bombs" ...... or....
" flows out of this world, imma imma martian"

Anyway, I didn't actually catch the meaning behind about every line you wrote.. wait up, did get a few of em, but the rest - WHAT THE FUCK? No offense man, but u need to get ya point across in another way!

Keep writing, it's all about tryin and failin till u find your style, something better then ya grandma's recipes! lol
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