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The Medication To Your Outbreak

Post by Omega Bill »

Arv never was a threat, his fake personals crack n come late
He signed his own death fate, mention me Ill slap ur slanty eyes straight
Dude said hes a lone wolf, but hes ridin saw like "Oh my god faster Jay"
Crew screams plaster gays, Arv joined ur crew cuz he could no longer masterbate
Never wanted a crew until last week, he needed back up to even mention stompin Dom
Faggot knew he couldnt pass me, cause Arvins starvin for feed like he celebrates Ramadan

Rell you shoulda kept quiet, your punches cant hit he know he aint harmin me
And when the fuck youd start gettin violent? I thought you were all bout E-HARMONY
"This is the match you see", point click, when the girls u choose, are better at rappin than you!
Dissin dude, u say this is fa fun, when your just butt-hurt cuz Harle wasnt givin you none!
You think you have some sick punches, when my punches knock jaws and de-set teeth
You tryna diss someone like me when 6 months ago you couldnt even handle net beef
Fuck are you to test me? Have J put you to bed, watch the recognition of ya name fade
Rusty as fuck n since you been back you couldnt drop heat if you carryin Dwayne Wade!

You tryna come up and get fame, you need taught you aint a ace or no spades
Rap like u was taught by the gay brigades, the fuck u gon have a S.A.W. wit no blades?
Read your drops my IQ downgrades, only thing dark bout u is when you hidin in Nights Shade
Knife graze top of ya melon ya mouth blew shut, you ain the only one handin out crew cuts
And the way your boys constantly sucking you off youre gonna need a pair of new nuts
You call out girls when you just got issues with pink, Squad Up should be changed to Tissues Inc
Cry bout votes cuz ya dress dont fit u, Soldias on a mission, kill this btch cuz ur bars shit dude
You elite? but ya musta been teasin, cause disses got you chokin and have ya cease breathin
U fiending for beef, but I fuckin give you a week till you do like Rell n say "Peace Im lleavin"

Lesson learned, the powers turned in the favor from the 'Dicktakers', scratch but ya claws miss (Dictators)
You say that you gonna over-run Illest, but none of yall could touch me after you 'Saw Diss'
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Post by JayGunna »

haha pretty neat...


You elite? but ya musta been teasin, cause disses got you chokin and have ya cease breathin
U fiending for beef, but I fuckin give you a week till you do like Rell n say "Peace Im lleavin


that was harsh...nice one

good shit homeboi...
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Some Of ya Shit Was Koo ..
But Some Of ya Shit Was Either Played Or Hella Forced ..
Lol Like That Dictakers shit ..
It`s Dictator Fam ..No Where Near tha Same except Tha Prefix ..
Lmao it`s Funny That you Got Tha Time to Diss Back But Not Battle ..

Hmmz ..
Anyways Koo Drop ..
Not Really Hard Hittin ..But it Was Pretty Good ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by thaphantom »

had to read this. pretty slick. i see you have gotten a little better. some of ya stuff was a lil forced here and there. but that's just our point of view. u could rap tottally different then everyone else. thats why me rappin verbally is better then typing it. but yeah good stuff. not sure how much i'ma be on here. i'ma be starting college soon. so yeah. iight man keep postin. and elevating..peace
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Post by complexity »

I'm going to quote the lines, I didn't like.

The rest of the diss was pretty decent.

"Dude said hes a lone wolf, but hes ridin saw like "Oh my god faster Jay"
Crew screams plaster gays, Arv joined ur crew cuz he could no longer masterbate "

That line is so lame.

"You tryna come up and get fame, you need taught you aint a ace or no spades
Rap like u was taught by the gay brigades, the fuck u gon have a S.A.W. wit no blades? "

The punch was good, but the rest of it was pretty horrible. And stop mentioning gay in every bar. If you want to put yourself ahead of rappers. You need to be more creative.

"Knife graze top of ya melon ya mouth blew shut, you ain the only one handin out crew cuts
And the way your boys constantly sucking you off youre gonna need a pair of new nuts"

I told you this was played and to not use it. Plus just to much filler. It takes an hour to get to the point.

"Fuck are you to test me? Have J put you to bed, watch the recognition of ya name fade
Rusty as fuck n since you been back you couldnt drop heat if you carryin Dwayne Wade! "

I preferred the line done by someone in 05 on here. When they said "put heat across your chest, like Dwayne Wade".

"You call out girls when you just got issues with pink, Squad Up should be changed to Tissues Inc
Cry bout votes cuz ya dress dont fit u, Soldias on a mission, kill this btch cuz ur bars shit dude "

What the hell.

Overall, you stuck on concept pretty well. The personals were above average but not always executed to their full potential. To many references to gayness and males genitals to come off as a non-homo diss. A lot of bad wording.

It was a lot of bars, so people need to take that into consideration when leaving feedback, as will I, but I think this was worth a 7.9/10.
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Post by Arvincible »

lol good shit bill, you got my feed on this on aim, but yeah

you did try to get on my ass about this,

but truth be told, you just a two year old
and imma hit you back with a drop in a minute
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Post by Glamtrash »

This was aright, but I've read much better from you, so I'm going to assume this was one of those "I'm-fucking-bored" things.
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