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Teardrop Laughter

Post by Kurse »

A loss is a loss, throw ya life all off-set //
ego's bruised which explains why ya cries so constant //
I know ur lost vic, wonderin, "whuts a nigga to do!?" //
how you call urself a goon when it's obvious theres bitch in you //
ya exercise the re-eval thread, i know ya clit-still-hurt //
and if you cry long enough, maybe the shit-will-work //
but why man up, when you can score wit a cheap win //
bust a good nut on ya name in battle but wont wear a sheep skin //
nigga it's weak sin to indicate that u better than Kurse //
it's like i'm married to the rap game the way i'm in for better or worse //
i'm all in ur thirst, ur familar wit the taste of defeat //
it's nuthin descreet, only thing you'll ever beat is ur meat //
but even then you still tend to get all emotional //
ya mom sittin in the bathroom like, "Where'd all the lotion go!?" //
but'cha level of pathetic-ness doesn't end there //
u got dick-riders stuck on u so good they can be mistaken for pubic hair //
but you don't mind, we all know you like attention-from-guys //
and if "lacking truth" wasn't GAY, you'd get an errection-from-lies //
but enough time spent, i dropped this shit outta boredom //
thought I'd take a sec of my time to remind u of ur role on this forum... //
...pussy...
mind ya manners, don't come in the thread wit ur bitchin //
if you do, all ya did was show dat ur guilty conscience was itchin. //

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Last edited by Kurse on Fri May 16, 2008 4:49 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Post by Omega Bill »

Nice flow.
Good multis
Nice punches.

Real good for a subliminal even though it's obvious who you're talking to.

Nice drop man. It's nice to see you drop text every once in awhile too.
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Post by Momeijah »

but why man up, when you can score wit a cheap win //
bust a good nut on ya name in battle but wont wear a sheep skin //
nigga it's weak sin to indicate that u better than Kurse //
it's like i'm married to the rap game the way i'm in for better or worse //
i'm all in ur thirst, ur familar wit the taste of defeat //
it's nuthin descreet, only thing you'll ever beat is ur meat //
but even then you still tend to get all emotional //
ya mom sittin in the bathroom like, "Where'd all the lotion go!?" //
but'cha level of pathetic-ness doesn't end there //
u got dick-riders stuck on u so good they can be mistaken for pubic hair //
but you don't mind, we all know you like attention-from-guys //
and if "lacking truth" wasn't GAY, you'd get an errection-from-lies //

^That Stood Out The Most To Me. The Flow Was Dope There, And The Lacking Truth Punch Was Sweet. u Got ur Point Across Nice And Clear in This Drop, Flow Fell Off a Couple Of Times in The Piece, it's Cool ur Using More Multis as Well. Overall it Was a Pretty Solid Diss For a Quick Spur Of The Moment Drop, Keep it Up.
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Post by Dead Silence »

damn good to see some text kurse.

shit was real good
ur multis were on point
and ur flow
wordplay is wat i expected

but even then you still tend to get all emotional //
ya mom sittin in the bathroom like, "Where'd all the lotion go!?" //
^i really Loled to this one lol
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Post by Cee4 »

i take this is for Rell lol
overall it was good for a quick put down piece. i thought it was missing a couple killer punches. i`ll be honest ive read better from you but it was still a solid piece
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Post by ÐÛÇ£» »

Nice Drop Bro...I Expect To See More From You and Lmao @ If Lacking Truth Wasnt Gay...You'd Get Erection From Lies...
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Post by MesaR »

yeah there were multis basic as hell though and punches were decent
flow and evrything like that was pretty good, iv'e read better from you
still not a bad drop, it's good to see audio heads drop text for a while
stick around in scriptures my man i'll be checking out your other drops
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..Fuck that gay shit you say on a beat..
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Post by ..DaGreatest.. »

nice shit right hurr bruh..

but'cha level of pathetic-ness doesn't end there //
u got dick-riders stuck on u so good they can be mistaken for pubic hair //

damn..that was hott dude props on dat
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