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Post by HKX »

A lil sumthin' I came up wit at work lol hope dis shit is better than da other one I dropped yesterday lol



I'll sweep thru these cats like bullets 4rm a sawed-off
I got a cold heart but my flow is hotter than lava
I'll beat u down like a kid gettin' whooped by his mama
got everybody laughin' and pointin' at u sayin' "HAHA"/
like Nelson Muntz da main bully 4rm da Simpsons
attackin' and smashin' these pussies while there wit there bitches/
I'm so loco I'll shit in ur mouth
than I'll tape it shut so u won't spit it out/
I'm sick B, ur ditzy, like Britney
I spit these, bars sickly, like Whitney/
a nigga like me is bound 2 kill ya'll like a mercenary
murda me right... I'm still waitin on someone 2 pop dat cherry
call my stilo sex I could flip it 4rm doggy 2 missionary
u can't touch my flow best read a dictionary
tweak ur vocab b4 u come mess wit da extraordinary
pray 2 Allah, God, who ever u want but don't 4get da Virgin Mary
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Post by - Mutual - »

this had better multies than ya last script
over all i liked it hopefully you'll keep it up and you'll be better than you are at audio's
nice man fav bit>I'm sick B, ur ditzy, like Britney
I spit these, bars sickly, like Whitney/
keep spittin ya
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by HKX »

good lookin on da feed my nigga
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Post by MesaR »

Yeah this was alot better then your other script basic metaphores and punchlines keep working on it man

I got a cold heart but my flow is hotter than lava
^ Basic as fuck.

I'm so loco I'll shit in ur mouth
than I'll tape it shut so u won't spit it out/
I'm sick B, ur ditzy, like Britney
I spit these, bars sickly, like Whitney/

Prob the best bars in your verse

keep up, keep droppin, work on creativity
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Post by Cee4 »

this was alrite. nothin special. obviously it flowed nice being that ur an audio artist. some of it was kinda basic but overall i liked it.

I'm so loco I'll shit in ur mouth
than I'll tape it shut so u won't spit it out/
I'm sick B, ur ditzy, like Britney
I spit these, bars sickly, like Whitney

i like the same bit a sequence quoted
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

..Shit Was Simple as Hell ..
Doesn't Really Matter if it`s Audio or Text ..
Lupe is a Audio Obv.
But He is Very Lyrically Creative ..
Like Tha Punches Was Simple ..
Every Rapper alive Used That Whitney Houston and Britney Spears Shit ..
And Tha Multies Were Basic ..
Tha Whole Drop Was Juss Like ...
Okay ..Lol ..
But it is Better Than That Other Shit ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

aRViNCiBLE
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