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I'll book these feeble foes on tha shelve so whose claim is up
If I had my own spidersense I'd alert myself I'm too dangerous!!
Their like “he's overratedâ€
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Post by Omega Bill »

[font=Comic Sans MS]This piece was pretty nice man.

Flowed pretty smoothly. Had some nice wordplay and punches through the piece.

Have snitches in stitches fucked up lookin dead and schooled
Hoes that talk out the side of the neck get a head unscrewed

I liked that but I think was basic compared to your other lines.

Yall ridin so I see flashes of Homers like Simpson family pics

Hate 2 be a Edwards Scissorhand fan but nobody else cuttin it

Son I got 'quotables' off tha dome like a comic thought bubble

Liked those lines the best. Keep droppin.[/font]
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Post by ..DaGreatest.. »

thanx man apprieciated
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Post by Arvincible »

Decent first script man, its pretty clever stuff here and there, decent punches and a potentially explosive verse if u put more into it ya kno?

bill pointed out the best lines but yeah I agree, ur better than most cats that come here.

keep it comin and stay up bruh


This piece is 7/10 man
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

..Shit Was Like Two Played Bars From Bein ass ..
Not Dissin ..
But Tha Punches U Throw are Like From `04 ..
U Gotta Get More Complex ..
And Creative ..
Ya Flow is Decent ..
Multies Pretty Simple ..
Everythin Else Pretty Koo ..
Juss Work On Craftin ya Punches ..
U Should Be Much Better ..
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.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by ..DaGreatest.. »

ight thanx much apprieciated
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Post by Chicago »

this piece was iight, nothing too special. The punches need be worked on because they some been there, done there punches. It could have flowed better and work on the multies. Structure was alright though. Keep at it, and ull see improve ments im sure

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Post by Scip »

drop was decent...can be improved tho

i agree with rell some of the shit ive seen or heard before...not worded the way u had em but the concepts have been used

the flow was simple but it was straight

overall it was a decent drop fam

stay up and good looks
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