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Explicit Rap 18+ ft. Thatguyouhate

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Yellow is plex

I'm in a situation, I wake up in a suspicious place
last night I was with a malicious date, who wishes hate
we had a delicious plate, of nutritious steak
I take out my dick, and it was sick how quick her tits inflate
she says, i insist you stay, I'm like this is great
I wrapped my fists with tape, the night ended with a vicious rape
ok, I exaggerate, but this is fact, I wanted a chick with tits n ass
sick of all the chicken scratch, stds got me with an itch n rash
I'm quick to catch diseases, I want no shit attached
put my dick in fast, and see all my chickens hatch
so I seek a virgin at a christian mass, doing christmas crafts
i couldn't miss this ass, I wanted to fist this snatch
it wasn't a realistic task, i say, want to date? she says no, I persist to ask
I pick a gat, I'm quick to blast, hoe, better hope the ballistics match
after that, I turned into a new dude, I even bought some new lube
uploaded me screwing this hot jewish chick on youtube
have you viewed this shit? she's fully naked like a nudist chick
and my dick is huge and thick, looking like a tree with pubes in it
I'm clipping mine, I'm ripping rhymes, I catch a bitch with a fishing line
stripping dimes, cuz I got more than a bum at Christmas time
they be dripping slime, when I hit behind, like an accident, my dicks a crime
I'm so passionate, when I slip inside, honestly you lied slut
that's why you get tied up and fucked in your wide butt, with your thighs shut
don't try us, be ready to take my nuts, and dry puss, with my fly stuff
cuz i heard you like your guys rough, as for your cups, we'll get them a size up
you're my slut, it's time you cry up, when i fuck this girls face
everybody in the worlds fake, so call my nuts, pearls gates


i Was in Tha Club Wonderin How'd i Ever Meet This Trick
She Annoyin i Just Wanna Take Her Home An Beat Tha Bitch
Woke Up With Her Next To Me So i Had To Treat Her Quick
Asked if She Wanted Some Breakfast i Jus Made Her Eat My Dick
Found Out She Hadda Fetish But Her Feet Were Sick
No Way i Was Fuckin That So i Jus Started Beatin Quick
i Opened Up And Slapped Tha Whore Until She Asked For More
Hesitatin Outta Breath Like i Just Ran Laps Of Four
Met Another Bitch i Could Tell She Was Out Lookin For Love
Tried To Fit Her in My Schedule But i Was Already Booked Above
i Took Her Home Quick And Tied Her Up in Tha Closet
i Started Throwin Fists in Her Ass Like i Was Jumpin in Mosh Pits
i Choked Tha Whore Until i Started To Black Out i Lost it
Woke Up Quick From A "Wet Dream" i Was Sleepin Under A Faucet
Feel Sorry For Tha Next Broad Ran in Her House With Gloves And Mask
i Punched Tha Whore Straight in Tha Lips Then Jus Shoved Her Ass
Continued Ta Punch Her in Tha Mouth Until Her Lips Were Gashed
Tore Of Her Pants And Shirt Just Grabbed Her Hips And Smashed
She Wouldnt Shut Up Just Kept Screamin Sobbin And Cryin
i Yoked Tha Bitch Out Screamin i'm A Demon i'm Not Lyin!
i Pulled Out Threw A Rubber On And Just Dove in Her Ass
i Was Havin A "Field Day" Like Mexicans Out Mowin Tha Grass
Was Kinda Disgusted When i Started Pullin Corn Out i Was Worn Out
Already Busted And Planted My Seed So i Pulled Tha Thorn Out
Her Husband Came Home i Knew He Was Tha Man Of Tha House
i Hooked That Faggot in Tha Jaw And Realised i Just Hit A Man in A Blousse

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Post by MesaR »

fucking sick complexity your verse was fire man your first three bars were dope with the multis and was a good start towards this brutal story lmao at jj's first bars too this was to fucking funny man deff cracked a grin here haha..

i Was in Tha Club Wonderin How'd i Ever Meet This Trick
She Annoyin i Just Wanna Take Her Home An Beat Tha Bitch
Woke Up With Her Next To Me So i Had To Treat Her Quick
Asked if She Wanted Some Breakfast i Jus Made Her Eat My Dick

^ LOL! at the last line haha..

after that, I turned into a new dude, I even bought some new lube
uploaded me screwing this hot jewish chick on youtube
have you viewed this shit? she's fully naked like a nudist chick
and my dick is huge and thick, looking like a tree with pubes in it
I'm clipping mine, I'm ripping rhymes, I catch a bitch with a fishing line
stripping dimes, cuz I got more dimes than a bum at Christmas time

Lmfaooo Classic!
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Post by MagicMark »

LOL this was nice

plex - Funny stuff, content was good, a little repititive in some places but thats another story, overall was nice, multis and rhyming where cool too, forced in some places "tits n ass, itch n'rash" sounded a bit unatural, but flow was solid, the lines Seq quoted where the best, nice work

thatguyouhate - lol flow and multis smooth, a little forced again.. i.e laps of four and booked above, but in general they were nice, content was a little extreme lol, not my usual type, but as a horrorcore kind of piece it worked nicely, start of this was nice, multis smooth on that part.

Overall smooth work, nice job
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Post by complexity »

Word. I repeated a few rhymes. Oh well.

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Post by Arvincible »

i shouldve been in this collabo.

my type of topic lol good shit though folks

good to see plex back on the board.

tgyh wasnt outshined at all i believe

strong multis and a smooth flow for both of you

i suggest you guys be a team on the upcoming tourney

ok im dont talking peaace
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Post by HKX »

nice drop 4rm da both of ya'll shit was nice i dunno bout tgyh bein outshined i thought it was on da same level jus different sytles 4rm da both of ya'll
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Post by - Mutual - »

man nice shit i liked the verses funny shit
Plex:
I'm in a situation, I wake up in a suspicious place
last night I was with a malicious date, who wishes hate
we had a delicious plate, of nutritious steak
I take out my dick, and it was sick how quick her tits inflate
she says, i insist you stay, I'm like this is great
I wrapped my fists with tape, the night ended with a vicious rape

ThatGuyYouHate:
Found Out She Hadda Fetish But Her Feet Were Sick
No Way i Was Fuckin That So i Jus Started Beatin Quick
i Opened Up And Slapped Tha Whore Until She Asked For More
Hesitatin Outta Breath Like i Just Ran Laps Of Four
Met Another Bitch i Could Tell She Was Out Lookin For Love
Tried To Fit Her in My Schedule But i Was Already Booked Above

My Fave Bit^
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

disgusting and degrading
plex i would think ud be involved in something
like this, i think arv was right he shoulda
been in it

from a rap point of view
great multies great punches
i liked it, flowed really nice
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Post by 8th »

uh, wow. not really what i was expecting. but....

plex:

I'm in a situation, I wake up in a suspicious place
last night I was with a malicious date, who wishes hate
we had a delicious plate, of nutritious steak
I take out my dick, and it was sick how quick her tits inflate
she says, i insist you stay, I'm like this is great
I wrapped my fists with tape, the night ended with a vicious rape

ha, jesus @ ended with a vicious rape...Overall the verse was pretty sick. I haven't read shit from you, or really anyone, in forever. But multis were there like a muhfucker. Flow was very on point, overall, it was pretty damn tight.


thatone:

i Took Her Home Quick And Tied Her Up in Tha Closet
i Started Throwin Fists in Her Ass Like i Was Jumpin in Mosh Pits

ha, wtf. yours was a little more....rape-y. overall, beside the topic, it was pretty good. I woulda like to see some more multis. The flow was decent, but again, could be helped with some more multis. Overall is was pretty good....and disturbing...

disgusting and degrading
HAHAHA
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Post by DressToKill »

Plex - nice shit dude..rhyming and multies every which direction and it was weird how well you can describe some of this shit..im still debating if thats good or bad?

TGYH - Less complex in my opinion and not as descriptive..the peice was still good but after following up after plex's sexual rampage you gotta match it ya know?still pretty good but I was looking for more..

Cool drop guys interesting topic
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Post by complexity »

Lmao. Thatguyyouhate, this piece doesn't deserve this much feedback.

Thanks everyone, I hope it was good enough for a laugh.
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