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An Author Out Of The Write Mind..

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[align=center]Bloody Floors From Cruddy Gore Placed On The Scene
Delt A Fragrance That Peeled Nostrils Once Embraced From A Breeze
Tho Stable it seemed Faces Had Gleamed and gaped upon this cadaver
swaying through God's drift with raw skin disolving in layers
Left Slaughtered In Plain Dirt Was An Author Who Changed Earth
Giving Art To The Brain Of Children..For Thoughts To Remain Terse
Arnold's Unlaundered Grey Shirt Was Stained With The Blood That Was Once Geared
To Write Passionate Of Paths These Kids Uncovered From BLunt Fears
Some Would succumb Tears Reacting To The Outcomes And Tragedies
Whether Clouds Spun On Happy Themes,The Pouts Brung A Max To Means
When Published His books Werent An Average Read More Like Shadowing Life
Into A Capsule Of Strife,Euphoria,Or Maybe Fantasies With Castles And Knights
By Any Chance Probably The Future And What Holds For Our World
Many Chapters Were As Deep As The Pacific Ocean,Creating Poems As Their Pearls
Emotionally Twirled,It Was Like All Focus Altered This Writers Distinct Bed
Where Later He Was Buried By Crowds Who's Tears Ran Similar How His Ink Bled
Just Think Death Could Really Make Someone View Your Green Thumb's Mood In mind
Inspite Of Being A Ruined Idol,The question Is Was The Case Murder?, Or suicide?
Confused With Lines? I wouldnt Want You Fooled Into Stealth
But To Close The Book,The Only Human Arnold Couldnt Reach Out To..Was Himself[/align]
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Post by - Mutual - »

man this was quite good tho
it sounded a lil like a poem
but good anyways
7/10 hope ya keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Kay »

Pretty nice man, imagery and general content had me hooked, few lines seemed abit stretched but depends where you use pauses ect i guess. Overall a nice piece though, dope job, impressive
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thanks for the feed man..
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Post by Gutta »

that really impressed me man, ur vocab was insane. this is one of my favorite pieces that ive read on here that shit was really good man i like the style keep this shit up!

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thanks for the feed man i appreciate it.
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8-0-8
Brandon Heat (KO)
Falix (KO)
KraZyLyrical (KO)
Yasii(KO)
Led Poison(KO)
Jay 3rd (KO)
Demo (KO)
Pdubz (KO)
M.Flight (KO)
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Post by Dead Silence »

shiiiit.
fire son
my feed is pretty much like everyone elses
i like this shit a lot
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