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Vertikal
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My Breath Slowly Floats Away And Evaporates Like The Sky's Stolen Mist
My Flesh Beats Against The Earth UntilPain Sedates Like A Vengeful Broken Fist
Every Breath Becomes Painfull, Damn I Could Barely Breathe As I Pressed On
Gods No Longer Present,On His Leave He Was Hesitent And Decided To Blessed None
This Torment,Damn It Got Ta Me, I Hate To Say It But The Future Looks Bleek
And It's Fucked Up When Ya Family Can't Afford To Eat More Then Once A Week
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well nice stuff man this shit is dope
nice multies kept on concept and flowed nicely
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Post by Dead Silence »

good shit.
i think ur gonna make an impact on illest if u stay up wit ya shit
very impressed
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