Just Some Thoughts..

[Vertikal]

The Moments Yours, But Its Hard Breathing And Pushin Depression Outta Sight
Still; Ya Gotta Keep Shit Together, Even If Ya Squeezin Ya Asshole Tight
Odds Against You And Ya Bettin Ya Life, The Cards Been Replaced With A Mic
And The Time; It's Always Against You Ticking Away, Plotting Treason
So The Clocks Found Guilty Of Murder, So Its Hanging For Obvious Reason
You Live Like What A Topside Of Eighty Years? So In Reality Is It Worth It?
Tryna Wipe Tears Offa This Note Pad, And At The Same Time Searchin For Puprose
I Dunno Man, Its Like Writing Seems Worthless, Gotta Make Paper To Pay Bills
And At The Same Time, My Moms Ill, Tryna Keep My Head Above Water And Stay Real

[- Mutual -]

well nice piece but i mean you could be better if ya wrote longer verses
nice multies nice concept
8/10
keep'em comin

[Dead Silence]

good shit
loved the flow.
and the concept

good read

[B-Bear]

Inconsistent rhyme scheme, but good structure - had a nice flow to it.. other then that it's straight.. not good and not bad.. but u should be honoured for puttin all that emotion into it.. juss don't become to abstract and poetical when it comes to what u write, cause that'll just be boring..