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Post by Frank Black »

[align=center]Yes the Crown Wearer is Back
You so average, I'm so savage
I Surround Terror in Wacks
a Hound Bless ya with Gats, so my crews is Comin' Violent
& like Sex when the Kids Sleep, You dudes is Fuckin' QUIET!
Your game Pick it Up, nvm bitch you suck, GIVE it UP!
My Style? Sick as Fuck, but like sex changes ima SWITCH IT UP!
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yo Nobody on my Level.. and they Never Will
I'm.. Forever iLL, I hit em with Clever kills
witta Better Deal, my Cheddar Build
just Check the Skills, you aye Lesser Thrill
you Better Chill, 4 Techs aye Squeal
& I aint Braggin just move with ay Passion
to Leave dudes in a Casket, ruling these Foolies thats Cracking
the Game Down ..
..to Smithereens
and I Feel the Breeze... and the Pain Now
I will Defeat, you Little Geeks.. I Detain Clowns
so Yeild to Me.. or Feel the Heat
goddamit.. I'm the King better Throne Me
you a Fiend & a Phony.. got the League wanna Clone Me
plus you Teens is a Team full of Queens & Jabronis

ima Burn Em.. im Determined.. they the Fakest
you kids Low-Rated, im more like Most Hated
I leave you Hoes Naked, in places where Those Baited
my Flow Sacred, its No Faking, im So Blazing
so flow much Heat thru my Lungs it Feels my Throat Baking
I Smoke Greatness, & Flame those call me Mister Rot Crews!
Exchange Blows, & Gut Fuck ya bitch with the Same Sword
that Sephiroth Use

*Audio Maybe*

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Post by - Mutual - »

nice peice man
stayed on point
nice multies i liked it 8.5/10

and I Feel the Breeze... and the Pain Now
I will Defeat, you Little Geeks.. I Detain Clowns
so Yeild to Me.. or Feel the Heat
goddamit.. I'm the King better Throne Me
you a Fiend & a Phony.. got the League wanna Clone Me
plus you Teens is a Team full of Queens & Jabronis

my fave bit^
keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by Frank Black »

thanks man Bump!
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Post by Scip »

i was feelin this more than ur collab with mutual (no hate)

ur flow was alright, multies were alright...sorta got a style like lil wayne...ur punches are said or you make a slight connection with words but they aren't like hard...ur multies were decent helped make the flow better but at some spots ur flow was tough to read and rough around the edges...no doubt tho this was decent...keep spittin


a Hound Bless ya with Gats, so my crews is Comin' Violent
& like Sex when the Kids Sleep, You dudes is Fuckin' QUIET!
Your game Pick it Up, nvm bitch you suck, GIVE it UP!
My Style? Sick as Fuck, but like sex changes ima SWITCH IT UP!

^^Best Part in the whole thing
The Newest Cat On...

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thanks homie!
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Post by MesaR »

yeah this was a nice little drop for your first one on here, deff seen better but looks like you can hold your own, everything was straight not much i can really hate on, and word i liked this drop better then the one with mutual aswell.. keep up sdotw.
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Post by Haz »

Nice Shit My Dood..
i Disagree With ya flow Bein Aiight
i Thought Ya Flow Was On Point

You Had Some Nice Punches
LoL @ Da Fuckin Quiet Punch.
I Said Some Shit like 'Like havin Sex Wit nerds U Doods is Fuckin Geeks'..
You Deffo Had ya Multis Down To..
Good SHit My Niggah Keep It Comin... And i Agree i Liked This More
Then Ya Collab Verse.. Stay up
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Post by Çhåiñ$âw »

Yea man, this drop was hot. There were a few minor falloffs in your flow, but nothin major. Threw some sick punches, and kept the structure tight with the multies. I'm feelin it.
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Post by Frank Black »

thanks yall
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

nice puns, multis were koo, structure overall was straight, audio would make it a bit more interesting, good shit tho
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thanks
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Post by Omega Bill »

Nice shit man. Ya'll newcomers are really proving right off the bat you can really hold your own here.

Overall - Good drop. I caught onto the flow, people who can't catch the flow prolly aren't switching how it sounds outloud compared to just reading it in their head, like you said it's for audio, so it's meant to be read aloud and when you do that you can catch the flow.

Solid drop man. I'll be waiting for your next one.
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thanks yall!!
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