Why i Write (Part 5) Ft. Duc3

[- Mutual -]

all the "Why I Write" pieces are good but this had to be the best
nice flow
dope multies
pt4 was the closest to this i think
9/10 good shit ya know

i'm Burden By Slums Even When i Witnessed Tha Birth Of My Son
i Aint Wanna Be Here When i Breathe Tha Air is Hurtin My Lungs
My Nigga is Gone But His Soul Still Here Always Blessin Tha Streets
Nana is Gone She Was A Blessin Ta Me But Now She Restin in Peace

Always Used To Chop Up Tha Byrds An Hope For A Ki
Mama Brought Home Tha Crack Never Did She Kno Tha Dope Was For Me
i Grew Up Poor That's When i'd Go From Rags Ta Riches
Got Money in My Pockets An Met Plagues Of Bitches

from TOYH my fave bit^

Right Now I Know Times Is Hard And Ya Mind Bizzare,
Ya Went From Line N Cloth To Designer Cars, Rhymes N Bars, Climbed To Par,
Az I Find The War,Inclined The Raw,

Im Mad And It's Sad..It Truly Is..When Your A Dead Beat Mother Who Suffers With Moody Kids,
No Food On The Table So You Convert To Pawning...
Hell Has Swarmed Dem..How Can They Reverse The Spawning...

From DUC3 my fave bit^
keep'em comin
good stuff

[MagicMark]

okay, this was good

lets get Duc3 out the way, good shiz on your part, i liked how you came at this, didnt try and upstage, reflected nicely off TG's piece, using his emotion to come up with your own thoughts on the problems, last bar was prob my fav, you aided this piece nicely

TG's...

Flow and multis where hot, i liked the emotion running through the piece, chizzled in stone line was heat, tons of emotion, again, the last bar deserves a special mention, a poignant ending to tha piece, sometimes repeat use of multis were a little overused, ie fiend, again, but thats minor details, im being harsh, the general tone and deliverence of the piece was hot, and the emotion was deep to, good shiz..

[Çhåiñ$âw]

Holy shit, that's some of the hottest spit I've seen from EITHER of you. MagicMark was right on point with his constructive criticism so I won't bother with that junk, but regardless, I'm hella fuckin impressed guys. You both have completely different styles, yet made it mesh incredibly well, which isn't easy to do. Hot concepts with good flow, combined with a unique clash of steez. I'm definately feelin' it folks. Keep bringin' stuff like this to the table please. Enough said.

[Momeijah]

The Flow Of This Piece Was Pretty Sick Throughout, it Never Fell Off Once. TOYH This is Definitely One Of ur Better Pieces, Use Of Emotion And Description Was The Best Because Too Much Description Can Look Try Hard. Good Use Of Multis Aswell, Nothing To Really Complain About, ur Lines All Seemed To Have a Good Amount Of Thought Behind Them.

Duc3 ur Lines Weren't as Hard Hitting (But There Were More in ur 2nd Verse), Flow and Multis Kept On Point But Some Lines Just Seemed Bare, i Liked How u Spoke a Bit About TOYH Then Transitioned into ur Own Story, it Was Smooth But Definitely, Verse Was Dope.

[Kurse]

i'm Burden By Slums Even When i Witnessed Tha Birth Of My Son
i Aint Wanna Be Here When i Breathe Tha Air is Hurtin My Lungs
My Nigga is Gone But His Soul Still Here Always Blessin Tha Streets
Nana is Gone She Was A Blessin Ta Me But Now She Restin in Peace
Now i Got No Reason Ta Smile i'm Scarred Bleedin And Vile
i've Walked A Ways in These Shoes Niggaz Aint Seein These Miles

Sickest bars in the whole drop. ^^^^
-Not to take away from the rest of what was written, but that's what stood out to me from everything else. Maybe cuz I can almost relate to the feel.

Duc3 was sick on the multi-structure and TGYH definately had a solid written flow on his part. It was good to see to different texting styles mesh so well under one concept. Definately a nice drop. Good job pimps!

[Haz]

YO SON!!!....

Dis Shit Was BANANAZ..
Dats My Niggahz...

LMAO Duce Kill't His Lil Pieces To..
Damn Spazzd With The Flow ,Concept And Multis..

LMAO JJ yooou O'ded On This shit..


i'm Burden By Slums Even When i Witnessed Tha Birth Of My Son
i Aint Wanna Be Here When i Breathe Tha Air is Hurtin My Lungs
My Nigga is Gone But His Soul Still Here Always Blessin Tha Streets
Nana is Gone She Was A Blessin Ta Me But Now She Restin in Peace
Now i Got No Reason Ta Smile i'm Scarred Bleedin And Vile
i've Walked A Ways in These Shoes Niggaz Aint Seein These Miles
i Already Know i'm Only A Man But i Damn These Hands That Filthy
Not A Criminal But Every Time i Witness A Verdict i Take Tha Stand As Guilty
There's Never Been A Time i Didnt Reminisce After Tha Drugs Were Gone
i Be Wishin Tha Streets Plant One in My Skull i Pray That Tha Slugs Are Long
i Always End Up Prayin At Nana's Feet Hopin One Day We'll Meet Again


^^ Yooou Came Sick Right There...
This Is One Of ya Dopest Pieces Homie.. you Really been Steppin Ya Game Up
Dats Wuddup. Big Upz 10/10 Verse...



He Went From Sellin Caine Ta Dwell In Fame Born With A Rebellious Flame
A Young Nig Dumb As Fuck Didn't Even Know How To Spell His Name,
Im Mad And It's Sad..It Truly Is..When Your A Dead Beat Mother Who Suffers With Moody Kids,
No Food On The Table So You Convert To Pawning...
Hell Has Swarmed Dem..How Can They Reverse The Spawning...

^^^ That Was ill.. Nice First Line To Strt it 2.. 10/10..



Now I Know Times Is Hard And Ya Mind Bizzare,
Ya Went From Line N Cloth To Designer Cars, Rhymes N Bars, Climbed To Par,
Az I Find The War,Inclined The Raw,
Why You Cryin For,Let Me Hug And Hold You,Like A Thug Suppose To,
Fascinate Ya Suffering,Elaborate When Touchin Me....
Ya Dreams Have All Failed...Never Seen Fiends Call Bail,
I Withdraw Hell,And Insert Them In My Scriptures,
Look @ My Family Portrait..Tears Bursted From The Picture

^^^ Dat Shit Kill't Your First Verse Though..
Good Job With In The Lil Clip.. you Did Damage..



Overall Yall Just Spazzed With This Piece.
Good Job 10.Outta..10..Keep Um Comin Son..

Crew Collab's Comin lol

[-MiiLz.]

Always Used To Chop Up Tha Byrds An Hope For A Ki
Mama Brought Home Tha Crack Never Did She Kno Tha Dope Was For Me

Every Where Ya Look Now There's A Feind On Tha Block
Now it's Always My Fault When They Feind For Tha Rock

i'm Burden By Slums Even When i Witnessed Tha Birth Of My Son
i Aint Wanna Be Here When i Breathe Tha Air is Hurtin My Lungs
My Nigga is Gone But His Soul Still Here Always Blessin Tha Streets
Nana is Gone She Was A Blessin Ta Me But Now She Restin in Peace
Now i Got No Reason Ta Smile i'm Scarred Bleedin And Vile
i've Walked A Ways in These Shoes Niggaz Aint Seein These Miles


^^^ Nice

Right Now I Know Times Is Hard And Ya Mind Bizzare,
Ya Went From Line N Cloth To Designer Cars, Rhymes N Bars, Climbed To Par,
Az I Find The War,Inclined The Raw,
Why You Cryin For,Let Me Hug And Hold You,Like A Thug Suppose To,
Fascinate Ya Suffering,Elaborate When Touchin Me....



Right Now I Know Times Is Hard And Ya Mind Bizzare,
Ya Went From Line N Cloth To Designer Cars, Rhymes N Bars, Climbed To Par,
Az I Find The War,Inclined The Raw,
Why You Cryin For,Let Me Hug And Hold You,Like A Thug Suppose To,
Fascinate Ya Suffering,Elaborate When Touchin Me....

I Withdraw Hell,And Insert Them In My Scriptures,
Look @ My Family Portrait..Tears Bursted From The Picture


Ok ..Both Came Nice On Second Verses. Out The Whole Thing JJ Came The Hardest. Duce Had A Nice Flow, Multies, And He Came Real Creative In his Verse. But ima Rate This 7/10.

[*.HarleQuin.*]

i liked this piece a lot because it was full of emotion, the words of course were basic but with a piece like this it doesnt really have to be complicated to relay the message, i didnt really like the topic, drugs, struggle, bitches and hoes are all really played concepts but other than that the verses were on point tgyh's was definitely better but duce still pulled through with a few hot lines, flow was awesome..this would make good audio with the right track

[complexity]

You're a feedback whore.

"My Nigga is Gone But His Soul Still Here Always Blessin Tha Streets
Nana is Gone She Was A Blessin Ta Me But Now She Restin in Peace
Now i Got No Reason Ta Smile i'm Scarred Bleedin And Vile
i've Walked A Ways in These Shoes Niggaz Aint Seein These Miles
i Already Know i'm Only A Man But i Damn These Hands That Filthy
Not A Criminal But Every Time i Witness A Verdict i Take Tha Stand As Guilty
There's Never Been A Time i Didnt Reminisce After Tha Drugs Were Gone
i Be Wishin Tha Streets Plant One in My Skull i Pray That Tha Slugs Are Long
i Always End Up Prayin At Nana's Feet Hopin One Day We'll Meet Again
Feels Like i'm Hit And Cant Breathe Again i Open My Eyes And That's When i See Again
Every Time i Look With Tears in My Eyes Her Name Still Chizzled in Stone
i Still Feel Like it's My Fault it's Hard Ta Breathe While i'm Livin Alone
Always Roll Tha Dutch And Light it Up And End Up Wishin For Brighter Days
i Smoke 'Til i Choke Grab Tha Pen And Write Away Hopin My Last Nights Today...."

Wow..probably your most quotable verse to date. Nice inners in that last bar and the punchlines/metas and description were all on point.

The first verse was pretty god awful, but it brought more hype to the second one.

"
He Went From Sellin Caine Ta Dwell In Fame Born With A Rebellious Flame
A Young Nig Dumb As Fuck Didn't Even Know How To Spell His Name,
Im Mad And It's Sad..It Truly Is..When Your A Dead Beat Mother Who Suffers With Moody Kids,
No Food On The Table So You Convert To Pawning...
Hell Has Swarmed Dem..How Can They Reverse The Spawning... "

The first bar was funny, but in the context of being a real serious song. I hope you learned to spell your name sooner than later. I didn't think the wordplay at the end was amazing either.

"Right Now I Know Times Is Hard And Ya Mind Bizzare,
Ya Went From Line N Cloth To Designer Cars, Rhymes N Bars, Climbed To Par,
Az I Find The War,Inclined The Raw,
Why You Cryin For,Let Me Hug And Hold You,Like A Thug Suppose To,
Fascinate Ya Suffering,Elaborate When Touchin Me....
Ya Dreams Have All Failed...Never Seen Fiends Call Bail,
I Withdraw Hell,And Insert Them In My Scriptures,
Look @ My Family Portrait..Tears Bursted From The Picture"

I'm not feeling it. Once again an oxymoron of a line "Why You Cryin For,Let Me Hug And Hold You,Like A Thug Suppose To,".

Overall, I feel like an asshole for saying it, but duc3 didn't even deserve to be on this collaboration. Thatguyouhate, probably dropped his best verse to date and Duc3 didn't fit. That is just the case in this situation (by the way, people are bitches who leave great feedback for no reason, all of you should die).

The feedback king has returned.

Oh, and you might snatch the dedication award from me with this series and possibly even series of the year.

[HKX]

The whole drop was sick but this stood out 2 me cuz it reminded me of my cousin TOYH Why I Write is def dope so far. People could actually relate 2 da things ur droppin' man which is a good thing. You def kno wat ur doin' on the writtin' keep it up man

My Nigga is Gone But His Soul Still Here Always Blessin Tha Streets
Nana is Gone She Was A Blessin Ta Me But Now She Restin in Peace

Duc3 went in on his I like how he came out on the multies I felt like he should've wrote more tho but 4 a lil read it was still sick good drop 2 da both of ya'll def keep droppin'