Gimme The Loot

[DressToKill]

Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man
Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man

I Was The Head Hancho,And Partners With Shane
We'd Deal Daily,Feinds Paying Us To Harvest The Caine
We Were Ontop,Both Cliques Never Lacked Profits
Running New York With Dime Hoes And Fat Pockets
So I Packed Rockets,That Id Blow Off Of Your Chin
For Trying To Rob Me..But Shane?Id Never Thought It'd Be Him
We Got A Phone Call About 9:30,Got A Order For 7 Kilo's
From A Mexican Hustler Up In Harlem Named Timo
He Had A Bad Rep But I Never Thought Id Get Fucked
So Me And Shane's Boys Went And Jumped In The Truck
Headed Up Into Harlem And At 12:00 Pm We Met Him
To My Suprise They Pulled Gats..Told Me To Spread Em
They Stood High And Mighty Talking How If I Moved Id Be Dead Quick
They Left Sayin "Stay Out Of New York Or You'll Be Left Full Of Lead Bitch"
They Jetted Off In The Truck,And Thats All I Can Remeber
It Didnt Matter..I Called A Cab Back Home And Grabbed The Baretta
Called Some Hook Up's..Told Em This Shit Gonna Get Messy
6 Boys And Me Packing Arms We Knew It Was Gonna Get Heavy
Now Here I Sit In The Chevy Truck,With My Gat..I Cock It Back
In A Few Minutes..Im Gonna Earn All Of My Profits Back!
We Creep Around The Side..Scoping Out The Duplex
I See One Of Shanes Boys And Shoot Him Through The Chest
We Woke Up Rest Of Em,But Im Thinking About The Pay Roll
So I Duck Behind A Garbage Can And Bust Shots But Stay Low
In A Matter Of Minutes Were Near The Door Crawling
I Can See His Fortress Crumbling And Falling
We Gain Entrance Into The House I Tell My Boys Watch The Door
Im Creepin Inside Looking For Shane..Trying To Even The Score
He Jumps Out We Both Bust,Our Spirits Are Facing Death
He Catches Me In The Knee And I Penetrate His Neck
I Stumble Up In Pain..Look Over And Mumble "You Think You Can Fuck Me"?
I Stand Over His Shaking Body With The Gat..And Bust 3
Little Did I Know Timo Jetted For The Door And Tried To Escape
But My Boys Unloaded Clips And Fucked Him In The Chase
Got My Empire Back..Now I Hope You Understand
That If You Take My Loot..I Turn Into A Bad Bad Man


Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man
Gimme The Loot..Ima Bad Bad Man

[Scip]

shits pretty tight....good story in the rhyming...liked the flow...if you extended this shit more and used that chorus as like a sample or some shit this shit would be a dope fuckin audio track b...no lie...we gotta do a collab some time my dude...ill pm you with my sn so u can hit me up on aim sometime so we can get it poppin

[DressToKill]

Thanks dude..for sure just pm me with details man

[MagicMark]

yeah man, i liked this topical...

not the msot original story lol, thats my only cripe, it was done well...

you know me i like twists and what not, but this was just brutal, lol, just straight to the point and ruthless, which worked well with the chorus which is why i liked it...

start and end 4 bars where the hottest for me,

good shit man..

[Haz]

R.I.P!!


This Shit was Tough...
You Spazzed With The Story Line..
Good Shit... The Flow Was Good..
The Whole Build Up Of The Story Was ill..


I Was The Head Hancho,And Partners With Shane
We'd Deal Daily,Feinds Paying Us To Harvest The Caine
We Were Ontop,Both Cliques Never Lacked Profits
Running New York With Dime Hoes And Fat Pockets
So I Packed Rockets,That Id Blow Off Of Your Chin
For Trying To Rob Me..But Shane?Id Never Thought It'd Be Him
We Got A Phone Call About 9:30,Got A Order For 7 Kilo's
From A Mexican Hustler Up In Harlem Named Timo
He Had A Bad Rep But I Never Thought Id Get Fucked
So Me And Shane's Boys Went And Jumped In The Truck
Headed Up Into Harlem And At 12:00 Pm We Met Him
To My Suprise They Pulled Gats..Told Me To Spread Em


Solid As Hell^..


Good Topical

[DressToKill]

Thanks guys the feed is really appreciated

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

This Drop Was Pretty Cool ..
I Thought it Woulda Been Better if You Used a lot More imagery instead of Tha Simple Shit ..
But I Liked a Few Parts More Than Others ..
Endin Coulda Been a Little Bit Better ..
Overall it Was a Cool Read Fam ..Stay Up ..

[DressToKill]

This Drop Was Pretty Cool ..
I Thought it Woulda Been Better if You Used a lot More imagery instead of Tha Simple Shit ..
But I Liked a Few Parts More Than Others ..
Endin Coulda Been a Little Bit Better ..
Overall it Was a Cool Read Fam ..Stay Up ..

I aint coming at you or nothing just curious to know what you mean by simple shit?Im kinda new to topicals so im just looking to improve how I can create my story to the readers..so any help would be appreciated

[|.R.SON.aLL.|]

Like Get More Detailed into Tha Story Line ..
Like ya Plot is Koo ..
But When You Say You`ll Put a Bullet Thru His Chest ..
Don't Be Afraid to Get Gory Or Complex ..
When You Do Topicals You Have to Paint a Picture in Tha Reader`s Mind ..
Ya Know?

[DressToKill]

Yeah cool thanks fam..the advice is appreciated