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Post by MagicMark »

with ya punches its sad, yano they mighnt get praise
cause now it feels like "nothing's fresh anymore", like strikes in subway!
when my punches are killer, iller, they'd get ya bodi'ed
smash you prob'le, and all i need is "1 Bar" like Alcoholics!
im a beast with key's leave you deceased with free's
im like the sweetest cake, how everyone wanna piece of me
ya'll can look in the mirror, if you wanna know what bitches is
mad...cause i can free a part 2, thats better than the original
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so you can say you dope, but no one's buying it fool'
cause its obvious you "knot-in my class"... like rope tying school.. (Crazy..)

i electrify cats.. so fuck you'd get tazed man
look i "show cats the way/whey", like supplement salesman
so yo udrop a diss to me?.. you'll be backed up after
cause i'll you in "more casts" than a washed up actor...
it's funny, you think that verse sick, but that page aint vile
the punches you using.. wouldnt make it to my maybe pile (true)
you cats aint thugs, dont believe em' when they say they peel
but i cant help but"steal the spotlight" like stage play thieves..

so you can dickride my opponent.. but im hardly gettin' smothered
cause im "A cut above you fuckers".... like barbers over brothels..(Yeah..)

so dont try and write dope, cause you aint me brother
shit you "shouldn't even be touching techs/text anymore" like OAP robbers..
so quit talking all gangsters, when we know you not a G'
when we used to seein' "people robbin' fucks" like extras in batman pornography..


Who's on my level?........
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Post by MesaR »

ok this was abit of anti climax in my eyes, some lines were decent other's just plained suck, for example.

im like the sweetest cake, how everyone wanna piece of me

^ no. no. no. that's pathetic.

dont get me wrong, there were some good punchlines and all that just not like your typical shit.. was this a freestyle?!
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Post by MagicMark »

lol, sweetest cake was jus a laugh.. was cypherin' and thought it was funny...

eh... not really a freestyle, no...

thanks for the feed tho..
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Post by - Mutual - »

nice flow
sum good punches
sum played shit ya know
8/10
coulder been better


when my punches are killer, iller, they'd get ya bodi'ed
smash you prob'le, and all i need is "1 Bar" like Alcoholics!

my fave bit^
Keep'em comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

!!ILLEST MINDS!!
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Post by -MiiLz. »

Hahaha Man, Now This is Fire!!!! No Dick Riding Involve. Were You Dissing hazard? Who Ever You Dissing you Came Hard On, i Gotta Admit Some Parts i Didnt See Rhymes i Dont Know if i Messed Up Reading Or What, But Anyways You Rode On Who Ever You Dissig. im Not Gonna Quote Nothing Atm But Every Punch You Had Was Fire, You Got Some Nice Similees, And You Had A Killer Flow in This Verse ..You Should Write Like This When U battlin People ..Because it Might Effect Ur Win if Nobody Reads it Good..But Anyways i Rate This 9/10 ..Keep The Shit Going Man ..This The Type Of Shit That Get Me Tryna Spit ..But Yeah Also See if i Can Get in Yo Crew Man ..
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Post by MagicMark »

thanks duke, someone with a similar style to me lol

thing is, i know how to battle (and have the better verse)....and thsi type of shiz aint what people are looking for in battles, well not this site anyways.. so i adapt and do what i have to do to produce the better verse

tho this is my usual style, creative wordplay/punches/personals

and this is just cypherin', not dissing anyone in particular, the feed is greatly appreciated


And if the crew ever comes into being, give us a shout....
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Post by Frank Black »

nice verse man!!
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was Pretty Good ..
I Liked Tha Verse ..
Nice Multies, I Felt a Few Subliminals in There ..
Those Were Koo, ya Punches Were Pretty Decent ..
Nothin That Made Me Like Oohh Shit ..
But Overall it Was a Good Verse Man ..
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.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was Pretty Good ..
I Liked Tha Verse ..
Nice Multies, I Felt a Few Subliminals in There ..
Those Were Koo, ya Punches Were Pretty Decent ..
Nothin That Made Me Like Oohh Shit ..
But Overall it Was a Good Verse Man ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

aRViNCiBLE
SCiP
MiiLZ

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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

This Was Pretty Good ..
I Liked Tha Verse ..
Nice Multies, I Felt a Few Subliminals in There ..
Those Were Koo, ya Punches Were Pretty Decent ..
Nothin That Made Me Like Oohh Shit ..
But Overall it Was a Good Verse Man ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

JayGUNNa
RELL FiaSCO

aRViNCiBLE
SCiP
MiiLZ

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Post by MagicMark »

Cool, i see what ya'll saying...

thank you for the feed, its appreciated..

to me, i'll use the scriptures to do what i like, and to practice/bs my style a bit... so it mighnt't be everyone's favourite, but i aint trying to appeal to everyone on every piece, ya get me?

and ive got a topical in the works that should blow a few minds..
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